Go For Gold
Thinking about the Games...what else?2 total reviews
Comment from Jacob1395
I'm afraid I haven't watched anything of the Olympics, I never do really, but from the news reports it is clear to see the joy on athletes faces when they win and the disappointment when they lose and I think you conveyed that well in your poem. An excellent piece.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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I'm afraid I haven't watched anything of the Olympics, I never do really, but from the news reports it is clear to see the joy on athletes faces when they win and the disappointment when they lose and I think you conveyed that well in your poem. An excellent piece.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Jacob. I confess I too, have gleaned the inspiration from the news. It is about the only positive thing to hear these days
Comment from samantha0930
This is a nice poem, and I like the picture that goes with it. I also like the rhymes, but there are a couple lines that break the rhyme scheme (laziness, zest, you), and the last line feels a little weird to me, both because it doesn't rhyme, but also because it's so much shorter than every other line. The emojis are interesting to use in between stanzas, although maybe there might be a better one to use than the thumbs up emoji? I think there might be one of a medal, like the ones they wear around their necks if they win.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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This is a nice poem, and I like the picture that goes with it. I also like the rhymes, but there are a couple lines that break the rhyme scheme (laziness, zest, you), and the last line feels a little weird to me, both because it doesn't rhyme, but also because it's so much shorter than every other line. The emojis are interesting to use in between stanzas, although maybe there might be a better one to use than the thumbs up emoji? I think there might be one of a medal, like the ones they wear around their necks if they win.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thanks Samantha These are good points I took it to be a fge=ree poem and try as I might the computer did not oblidge me with spaces for the verses.
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Oh, that's strange that it wouldn't let you have a blank line in between. Maybe it would work if you just used the "space" button a couple times? Because then it would look blank, but there would technically still be something there.