thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "gone fishing"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
5 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, s.m.
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
It's strange that you're entering this into a happy birthday contest because there is nothing about a birthday in your poem
I didn't know until I saw the contest name that this was going to go in a happy birthday contest or be a happy birthday poem
I thought you were entering it into a limerick contest, which is why I said what I said below. But I'm still going to say it in case you're interested in writing limericks
What clue was supposed to tell me that this was a happy birthday poem?
I am glad your husband and your son like to go fishing. I don't like it. I only went fishing because of my son. We went on boats in the ocean and caught salmon. He was 10 years old at the time. We had anchovies was.our bait. I made the mistake of bringing tuna sandwiches
Boy was out of mistake. They smelled almost just like the anchovies and no matter how much we washed our hands anchovy sent was still on them.
Do you know that your rhyming scheme matches a limerick?
So the last line lacks the meter of a limerick and the first line has ten syllables instead of 8 it doesn't have the same meter
But your middle two lines of six syllables each with iambic pentameter meter are very good for limerick.
Look at the meter in your 2 6 syllable lines. Every other syllable is a harsh sound, and every other syllable is a soft sound. Some people call lines that end with a soft sound feminine endings
Your second line had eight syllables, but the meter was slightly off
I don't know if you're interested in meter at all but it's very important to me because I submit to a site that publishes online poetry and it's free to post but they don't take the ones they don't want. They only
take poems where the meter is perfect and the rhyming is as well.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
  |
Hi, s.m.
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
It's strange that you're entering this into a happy birthday contest because there is nothing about a birthday in your poem
I didn't know until I saw the contest name that this was going to go in a happy birthday contest or be a happy birthday poem
I thought you were entering it into a limerick contest, which is why I said what I said below. But I'm still going to say it in case you're interested in writing limericks
What clue was supposed to tell me that this was a happy birthday poem?
I am glad your husband and your son like to go fishing. I don't like it. I only went fishing because of my son. We went on boats in the ocean and caught salmon. He was 10 years old at the time. We had anchovies was.our bait. I made the mistake of bringing tuna sandwiches
Boy was out of mistake. They smelled almost just like the anchovies and no matter how much we washed our hands anchovy sent was still on them.
Do you know that your rhyming scheme matches a limerick?
So the last line lacks the meter of a limerick and the first line has ten syllables instead of 8 it doesn't have the same meter
But your middle two lines of six syllables each with iambic pentameter meter are very good for limerick.
Look at the meter in your 2 6 syllable lines. Every other syllable is a harsh sound, and every other syllable is a soft sound. Some people call lines that end with a soft sound feminine endings
Your second line had eight syllables, but the meter was slightly off
I don't know if you're interested in meter at all but it's very important to me because I submit to a site that publishes online poetry and it's free to post but they don't take the ones they don't want. They only
take poems where the meter is perfect and the rhyming is as well.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
-
Thank you for your review and knowledge, I just learned about meter writing last week. I will work on that.
-
So. You are interested in meter?
Comment from patcelaw
Has been a very happy birthday and I also wish your sons a very happy day with her father fishing. Have a wonderful evening and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
|
Has been a very happy birthday and I also wish your sons a very happy day with her father fishing. Have a wonderful evening and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
-
Thank you for your review I appreciate it.
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed your poem, but I don't think it was appropriate for the "Karen's Birthday" writing contest. Did you maybe misread the description or enter this by accident? Best wishes.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
|
I enjoyed your poem, but I don't think it was appropriate for the "Karen's Birthday" writing contest. Did you maybe misread the description or enter this by accident? Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
-
Thank you for your review, I appreciate it
Comment from Bill Schott
This limerick, Gone Fishing, has the proper formatting and brings the father to the lakeside to enjoy time with his kids during this rare and important bonding time. Nice.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
|
This limerick, Gone Fishing, has the proper formatting and brings the father to the lakeside to enjoy time with his kids during this rare and important bonding time. Nice.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
-
Thank you for your review and comments. I really do appreciate it.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written rhyming poem about the guys gone fishing. You used great descriptive and rhyming words. You used great imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
 |
This is a very well written rhyming poem about the guys gone fishing. You used great descriptive and rhyming words. You used great imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
-
Thank you for your review and comments I appreciate it. I am thankful for the rating. Hope you have a great day.
