Spirited Justice
Viewing comments for Prologue "Beauty, Brawn and Brains"Mystery, crime and ghostly high jinks
20 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
Sounds like a complicated plot will be unraveling in this mystery. You might explain who Arthur Beckett is, even though he's been murdered. Looking forward to reading this book. Thanks for the character list; it helps. Hugs & smiles! Carol
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Sounds like a complicated plot will be unraveling in this mystery. You might explain who Arthur Beckett is, even though he's been murdered. Looking forward to reading this book. Thanks for the character list; it helps. Hugs & smiles! Carol
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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thanks for suggeting a little more information about Arthur Bennett. I did make the change. I hope you enjoy the story and continue to follow. I always appreciate your enjoyment and support.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BOO ghost
Oh, a new novel. Nice novel name and picture. Your character list describes the list of characters. A ghost detective and a ghost advisor. Beauty, Brawn, and Brains, nice alliterations. The pageant's deadly legacy, a history of unexplained deaths and disappearances, will slowly come to light, challenging investigators to unravel a mystery steeped in danger and deceit. Oh, this must summarize things, this is a beauty pageant of some sort? There will be ghosts haunting an establishment? As result of the murders. Intriguing plot! Wish you luck with this new story.
BOO!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Oh, a new novel. Nice novel name and picture. Your character list describes the list of characters. A ghost detective and a ghost advisor. Beauty, Brawn, and Brains, nice alliterations. The pageant's deadly legacy, a history of unexplained deaths and disappearances, will slowly come to light, challenging investigators to unravel a mystery steeped in danger and deceit. Oh, this must summarize things, this is a beauty pageant of some sort? There will be ghosts haunting an establishment? As result of the murders. Intriguing plot! Wish you luck with this new story.
BOO!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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HI, Boo! Wow! Another great review and glittery stars. How very kind of you. I hope the story strikes your imagination and you enjoy it. Have a great day!
Smile, Carol
Comment from karenina
Great prologue! I was among your fans encouraging you to keep Eleanor around, as she was both smart as a whip and endearing in the last book!
And Jenna!
Lots of familiar names and a few new ones...
Just remember Garth must make his typically handsome appearance!
And you're off again to thrill and entertain us!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Great prologue! I was among your fans encouraging you to keep Eleanor around, as she was both smart as a whip and endearing in the last book!
And Jenna!
Lots of familiar names and a few new ones...
Just remember Garth must make his typically handsome appearance!
And you're off again to thrill and entertain us!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Good morning, K
Been a busy day and night for me and my eyes are crossed! I guess I couldn't let loose of my "friends" and we decided to take another journey together, Hope you like it!
Smiles, Carol
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You know I do!
Comment from lyenochka
Great prologue! It reads like the back jacket of a book. I think you can relax now and just post once or twice a week so you get a regular following. You might scare off some reviewers with too frequent posts.
Great to see those characters already to do their work in a new book!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Great prologue! It reads like the back jacket of a book. I think you can relax now and just post once or twice a week so you get a regular following. You might scare off some reviewers with too frequent posts.
Great to see those characters already to do their work in a new book!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Yes, I will try to slow down, Helen, but I can't make too many promises. My motor is running in high gear for some reason and it's like being a kid waiting for Christmas. LOl I loved the characters and it's been fun!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Here we go again. You're off and running. I'm glad to see Eleanor. I also see another Jenna, this one with an inside track. Can't wait to see what that's about. The story and plot sound intriguing. I know I will enjoy it.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Here we go again. You're off and running. I'm glad to see Eleanor. I also see another Jenna, this one with an inside track. Can't wait to see what that's about. The story and plot sound intriguing. I know I will enjoy it.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Hello, Lorraine! Trying to burn off some pent up energy and writing seems to be where I do it best. I saw a contest for a first chapter and that's how the whole thing got started again. I don't think I'll write so many chapters a day so that others can keep up better but one never knows.... when writing takes over it's off I go! LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, Carol, your mind is impressively active as you venture into another crime mystery story, this time in the glitzy world of beauty pageants. You've already set a scene of intrigue, deception and a history of suspicious, unsolved disappearances. Looking forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Wow, Carol, your mind is impressively active as you venture into another crime mystery story, this time in the glitzy world of beauty pageants. You've already set a scene of intrigue, deception and a history of suspicious, unsolved disappearances. Looking forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thanks Debbie...There was a contest for the first chapter of a book so of course it caught my attention and I jumped on board. I thought I needed the prologue so here we go! Thanks so much for your kindness and for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is the first I have read of this particular story. It sounds like the beginning of an exciting read, and I will look forward to reading more of this novel. Are you trying something different? I noticed that Eleanor is still a character.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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This is the first I have read of this particular story. It sounds like the beginning of an exciting read, and I will look forward to reading more of this novel. Are you trying something different? I noticed that Eleanor is still a character.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I think this will be a series maybe! I enjoy the characters and will use a different plot each time...not positive of that though. It's fun so I am doing it and hoping you enjoy!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from SimianSavant
I read this yesterday but wanted to see where you were going with it before commenting on the intro. It sounds intriguing. It's a little bit wordy for an intro. I suggest less vertical spacing between lines. That may take care of the rest actually, because the spacing makes it feel like the paragraphs go on for a long time.
I also suggest using all present tense: at the heart... IS Lisa.
will uncover => uncover
will navigate => navigate
If your narrator was delivering this in real life, I might use the verb tense you used, but in writing, efficiency is preferred -- at least by me!
Thanks for the read and looking forward to future installments,
SS
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I read this yesterday but wanted to see where you were going with it before commenting on the intro. It sounds intriguing. It's a little bit wordy for an intro. I suggest less vertical spacing between lines. That may take care of the rest actually, because the spacing makes it feel like the paragraphs go on for a long time.
I also suggest using all present tense: at the heart... IS Lisa.
will uncover => uncover
will navigate => navigate
If your narrator was delivering this in real life, I might use the verb tense you used, but in writing, efficiency is preferred -- at least by me!
Thanks for the read and looking forward to future installments,
SS
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Thanks again for all lyour suggestions and for taking the time to read my story. I certainly apreciate it. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is going to be a really exciting new book, Carol. I was a little surprised, (and pleased) to see Eleanor still here, I thought she would be off canoodling with Charles around the universe! Lol. I hope Garth is there as well. I've got to know him well.
This plot is fabulous, how on earth do you come up with them so fast? I'll be watching for chapter 1:)) I know everyone will love this story. I will. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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This is going to be a really exciting new book, Carol. I was a little surprised, (and pleased) to see Eleanor still here, I thought she would be off canoodling with Charles around the universe! Lol. I hope Garth is there as well. I've got to know him well.
This plot is fabulous, how on earth do you come up with them so fast? I'll be watching for chapter 1:)) I know everyone will love this story. I will. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Eleanor will only be a stop in now and then advisor to keep Danny on the straight and narrow...you will see why when I post...Maybe Wednesday. It's done and I'm working on Chap 2. Garth will be there later because of the international theme. I'm not familiar with pageants so I hope I can pull this off... more crime and less pageant. Suggestions are welcomed!!!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I don't know much about pageants, Carol, but I know as sure as I can breathe, you will master it! 👩🏻🎓💕💕
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You are way too kind! I love you for it though! Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Carol!
Your prologue sounds incredibly intriguing!
Your creative energy and imagination astound me!
I have never been a fan of beauty pageants, so I will be certain to be focused on your development of thought; I know for a certainty your story will be worthwhile!
Give me a nudge if I fall behind in my reviews!
Best Wishes!
And thank you for sharing!
Fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Hello, Carol!
Your prologue sounds incredibly intriguing!
Your creative energy and imagination astound me!
I have never been a fan of beauty pageants, so I will be certain to be focused on your development of thought; I know for a certainty your story will be worthwhile!
Give me a nudge if I fall behind in my reviews!
Best Wishes!
And thank you for sharing!
Fondly,
diane
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Neither am I since I think they exploit the women and for all the wrong reasons. This pageant is Beauty, Brawn and Brains giving everyone a fair chance, but the story really isn't about the pageant...it's about the corruption some people will go to for success and greed. Thanks so much Diane for the review and that you will be following the story. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol