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Not My Bag

mixing it up

9 total reviews 
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Oh No, No! I feel sick. That means you did an exceptional job crafting this story that generated feelings. The protagonist was left with no way out. The clown, on the other hand, has only a woman's suit to wear. Congratulations on your well deserved win.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much. Being a clown, I think he could pull it off. I picture the Pulitzer winner's acceptance speech starting with, "A funny thing happened on the way to the dinner . . . " no matter which outfit she chose.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Well, if he is receiving a Pulitzer, I don't really guess it truly matters that much what he might be wearing. LOL. Great job and congratulations on your blue ribbon winner. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much! (And it was a woman winning the Pulitzer-LOL).
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A great, clearly written switch story with a humorous ending. This definitely brought a smile to my face! Excellent dialogue advancing your strong contender. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thanks so much!
Comment from Wendy G
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A well written story about a situation which can so easily happen. One does wonder what the circus performer thought when he discovered he only had a power suit to wear.
Best wishes.
Wendy

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Hmm, perhaps another side of the story? Thanks so much!
Comment from Esther Brown
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Most excellent. Unfortunately I can imagine and have lived similar flights...true ones. Only the not nice part, not the winning a prize. Likely passengers have stories to tell from all over the world from our recent tech outage. Esther

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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That's a fantastic, comedic scenario! The mix-up with the luggage and the unexpected clown costume adds such a fun twist to the story. I thought this was well written and so entertaining.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Gunner Lil
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How did you get off the plane at JFK (New York) without your I.D., Passport and a boarding pass?
Plenty of time = enough of time
At nearly 8:00am =minutes before
Just barely = just in time
Delete the line, I can hardly...

Slow down and read it out loud and revise.
Thank you and good luck.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
    Thank you for your review.
Comment from zanya
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And what happened next ? It's an intriguing tale and draws the reader in but it would be oh so nice to know what happened while wearing a pyjamas and hoodie or a clown suit to receive a Pulitzer!!

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
    Thanks so much~not quite enough word allowance left to reveal that, it must be left to the imagination of the reader, I'm afraid.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
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I really enjoyed your story! The way you described the protagonist's frantic rush and the unexpected twist with the bag swap was both engaging and relatable. I felt the anxiety of missing the flight and the tension of the Pulitzer dinner vividly. The humor of ending up with a clown costume instead of a power suit was a delightful surprise that made me smile. Your attention to detail and the emotional ups and downs created a compelling narrative that kept me hooked. It's a fun and memorable story, and I can't wait to see how the protagonist handles the situation at the Pulitzer dinner!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much for your generous comments and review. I appreciate your feedback!