Sea Monster tales
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Comment from judiverse
I don't know what happened, but I thought I'd reviewed this already. The is rather poignant. I never thought of a heartbroken sea monster, mourning his lost love. The mermaid is there to comfort him, though. Creatures of the sea stick to one another and comfort them in painful times. Charmingly worded. judi
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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I don't know what happened, but I thought I'd reviewed this already. The is rather poignant. I never thought of a heartbroken sea monster, mourning his lost love. The mermaid is there to comfort him, though. Creatures of the sea stick to one another and comfort them in painful times. Charmingly worded. judi
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Yes, this poem is listed twice in my portfolio. I do not know why and what happened. Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, mermaids
It's a good thing he has a nice female friend to rub his scales and cheer him up.
She must be a mermaid. If he's a sea monster, then they would be an unlikely pair because she would be a lot smaller.
I noticed you changed the part in front of the two water drawers. That's good now it's clear what you're saying.
I think this is the same poem I saw a while ago, but it's just reworked. It must have a different title or I wouldn't see it again but please fix that little issue with Depths
Why do you keep spelling depths as depts. I pointed this out in a previous poem you're missing the H
"sinks his heart to
uncharted depts"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Hi, mermaids
It's a good thing he has a nice female friend to rub his scales and cheer him up.
She must be a mermaid. If he's a sea monster, then they would be an unlikely pair because she would be a lot smaller.
I noticed you changed the part in front of the two water drawers. That's good now it's clear what you're saying.
I think this is the same poem I saw a while ago, but it's just reworked. It must have a different title or I wouldn't see it again but please fix that little issue with Depths
Why do you keep spelling depths as depts. I pointed this out in a previous poem you're missing the H
"sinks his heart to
uncharted depts"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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This poem is listed twice in my portfolio. I have no clue why. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am going to change depts to depths right now. Elaine
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This piece beautifully portrays the depth of sorrow and solace found in companionship. The imagery of the sea monster's grief contrasted with the gentle support of his woman-fish friend creates a moving depiction of emotional healing. The quiet, soothing atmosphere you describe--enhanced by the setting sun and the presence of other sea creatures--adds a tender, peaceful touch to their bond. The sense of gratitude and comfort in their silent togetherness is poignantly captured, making it a touching exploration of support and recovery.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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This piece beautifully portrays the depth of sorrow and solace found in companionship. The imagery of the sea monster's grief contrasted with the gentle support of his woman-fish friend creates a moving depiction of emotional healing. The quiet, soothing atmosphere you describe--enhanced by the setting sun and the presence of other sea creatures--adds a tender, peaceful touch to their bond. The sense of gratitude and comfort in their silent togetherness is poignantly captured, making it a touching exploration of support and recovery.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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I am honored by your words. Thank you so much. Elaine