2024 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "The Edge of Night"*
8 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I like your personification of the new Day with her "open arms" to greet and encourage the addressee. I also like the "edge of night" which gives an almost physical feel to the intangible time period.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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I like your personification of the new Day with her "open arms" to greet and encourage the addressee. I also like the "edge of night" which gives an almost physical feel to the intangible time period.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister.
Love 🙂
Marival
Comment from barbara.wilkey
What a perfect time to have a rendezvous. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us. I really enjoyed the entire presentation. My mind is working overtime getting these two together.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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What a perfect time to have a rendezvous. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us. I really enjoyed the entire presentation. My mind is working overtime getting these two together.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara.
Gypsy hugs 😊
Comment from RJ Heritage
Lovely written and expressed Tanka poem.Your use of metaphorical language emphasizes the beginning of something new, perhaps a fresh love based on a hopeful fulfillment of such after one ended.
Beautifully presented
TJ
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Lovely written and expressed Tanka poem.Your use of metaphorical language emphasizes the beginning of something new, perhaps a fresh love based on a hopeful fulfillment of such after one ended.
Beautifully presented
TJ
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, TJ
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
the poem in your notes just has "i meet you"
probably forget to fix it when you were editing lol
a sweet romantic wishful dreams tanka with nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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the poem in your notes just has "i meet you"
probably forget to fix it when you were editing lol
a sweet romantic wishful dreams tanka with nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley. Thank you for catching that error. 🙂
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Such an evocative and romantic verse! Love the description of the edge of night and the personification of dawn, adding a sense of satisfying harmony and completeness. Well done, Gypsy! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Such an evocative and romantic verse! Love the description of the edge of night and the personification of dawn, adding a sense of satisfying harmony and completeness. Well done, Gypsy! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Debbie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Love Tankas!
Yours has a gentle, evocative quality. The imagery of "the edge of night" and "the break of dawn" is vivid and creates a strong visual contrast between dreams and reality. It captures a sense of anticipation and hope, suggesting a transition from one phase to another with warmth and optimism. You effectively convey deep emotion and imagery in just a few lines, which is a strength of the form.
Great job!!!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Love Tankas!
Yours has a gentle, evocative quality. The imagery of "the edge of night" and "the break of dawn" is vivid and creates a strong visual contrast between dreams and reality. It captures a sense of anticipation and hope, suggesting a transition from one phase to another with warmth and optimism. You effectively convey deep emotion and imagery in just a few lines, which is a strength of the form.
Great job!!!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Patty.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
A nicely written post Gypsy, in the the poetic language that I enjoy, as always your presentation is flawless, and the theme is decidedly romantic and a lesson in short form writing, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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A nicely written post Gypsy, in the the poetic language that I enjoy, as always your presentation is flawless, and the theme is decidedly romantic and a lesson in short form writing, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Neonewman
You have certainly mastered this style, Gypsy, with grace and elegance, I must add. Thank you for sharing and the artwork is stunning as well.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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You have certainly mastered this style, Gypsy, with grace and elegance, I must add. Thank you for sharing and the artwork is stunning as well.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Steve.
Gypsy hugs