Pretty isn't always me
self reflection2 total reviews
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
I found this poem to be a powerful and candid reflection of personal struggles and the complexity of emotions. Your work is impressive in many ways:
1. Authentic Expression: The raw and honest portrayal of your experiences with dark themes and shifting moods is striking. Your willingness to confront difficult subjects like suffering and depression adds depth and authenticity to the poem.
2. Emotional Resonance: The way you contrast "pretty" with the realities of life--such as politics, death, and personal challenges--adds significant emotional weight. The repetition of "Pretty isn't always me" reinforces the theme effectively, keeping the reader engaged and empathetic.
3. Effective Imagery and Tone: Your use of imagery, such as "dark," "suffering," and "wild," creates a vivid picture of the internal landscape you describe. The tone of unapologetic honesty and self-awareness enhances the impact of your message.
One suggestion for improvement might be to refine the structure to create a more cohesive flow. Some transitions between themes feel abrupt, and smoothing these out could help in maintaining the reader's immersion.
A slight weakness in the work is that the poem's rhythm and form could benefit from more consistency, which might enhance its overall readability and impact.
Overall, your poem is a courageous and compelling exploration of personal and emotional complexity. I appreciate the raw honesty and look forward to seeing how you continue to express these profound themes in your writing.
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I found this poem to be a powerful and candid reflection of personal struggles and the complexity of emotions. Your work is impressive in many ways:
1. Authentic Expression: The raw and honest portrayal of your experiences with dark themes and shifting moods is striking. Your willingness to confront difficult subjects like suffering and depression adds depth and authenticity to the poem.
2. Emotional Resonance: The way you contrast "pretty" with the realities of life--such as politics, death, and personal challenges--adds significant emotional weight. The repetition of "Pretty isn't always me" reinforces the theme effectively, keeping the reader engaged and empathetic.
3. Effective Imagery and Tone: Your use of imagery, such as "dark," "suffering," and "wild," creates a vivid picture of the internal landscape you describe. The tone of unapologetic honesty and self-awareness enhances the impact of your message.
One suggestion for improvement might be to refine the structure to create a more cohesive flow. Some transitions between themes feel abrupt, and smoothing these out could help in maintaining the reader's immersion.
A slight weakness in the work is that the poem's rhythm and form could benefit from more consistency, which might enhance its overall readability and impact.
Overall, your poem is a courageous and compelling exploration of personal and emotional complexity. I appreciate the raw honesty and look forward to seeing how you continue to express these profound themes in your writing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
You are right with this! Everything is not all sugar and spice. Poems just as powerful can come with other emotions. It's great to just write what comes into your head, whatever it may be. That can bring about the best poems too. Thanks for sharing!
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You are right with this! Everything is not all sugar and spice. Poems just as powerful can come with other emotions. It's great to just write what comes into your head, whatever it may be. That can bring about the best poems too. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
