Ping
Poem 5/7/53 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I think men love woman more deeply than a woman loves a man. There are exceptions, of course, but I'm also always reading about men waiting years for a woman. I don't think that women do that as much. I think women are interested in settling down and having a family and a guy that won't pay attention to her at all, it's not something that she needs in her future. I hope she doesn't have an affair with the other guy that's what sometimes happens That is a sin and should never be dfone or contemplated. It hurts the other person so much and if that other person is your wife, why would you want to hurt her that much she bore your children nkids for you
So here he is actually waiting with
excitement for her ping. Now, he would've had to call her back or she would have to call him so they could talk and he could hear the soothing sounds. So that means rather thana ping he should've gotten a phone call maybe one of them called the other after the thing. Maybe the pen was just to tell him she's ready.
I really enjoyed your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I think men love woman more deeply than a woman loves a man. There are exceptions, of course, but I'm also always reading about men waiting years for a woman. I don't think that women do that as much. I think women are interested in settling down and having a family and a guy that won't pay attention to her at all, it's not something that she needs in her future. I hope she doesn't have an affair with the other guy that's what sometimes happens That is a sin and should never be dfone or contemplated. It hurts the other person so much and if that other person is your wife, why would you want to hurt her that much she bore your children nkids for you
So here he is actually waiting with
excitement for her ping. Now, he would've had to call her back or she would have to call him so they could talk and he could hear the soothing sounds. So that means rather thana ping he should've gotten a phone call maybe one of them called the other after the thing. Maybe the pen was just to tell him she's ready.
I really enjoyed your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A clear, concise 5-7-5 poem.
I feel your astute words capture the fate of modern society to be forever attached to the phone physically, emotionally or mentally.
A clear image is provided with introductory line and closure attained with the following two lines..
Well done
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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A clear, concise 5-7-5 poem.
I feel your astute words capture the fate of modern society to be forever attached to the phone physically, emotionally or mentally.
A clear image is provided with introductory line and closure attained with the following two lines..
Well done
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This haiku captures a feeling of anticipation and longing beautifully. The imagery of waiting for a phone to ping, paired with the desire to hear someone's soothing voice, evokes a deep sense of yearning. It's succinct yet emotionally rich, perfectly capturing the moment of waiting for a comforting connection. Nice work!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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This haiku captures a feeling of anticipation and longing beautifully. The imagery of waiting for a phone to ping, paired with the desire to hear someone's soothing voice, evokes a deep sense of yearning. It's succinct yet emotionally rich, perfectly capturing the moment of waiting for a comforting connection. Nice work!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
