Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Well this is charming and an excellent entry under the heading of romance. I like the way you've included dialogue throughout, together with your monorhyme. Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024

Thank you, Debbie.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Nicely written.
Has a childlike innocence which appears to define the unique
connection which romance imbues.
Presented with an engaging image.
Complies with the contest requirements.
Good luck.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024

Many thanks, Shirley.

Comment from Patty Mazzurco

Excellent

This poem captures a playful and lighthearted tone with its direct approach. The initial lines express admiration and a desire for a kiss in a straightforward manner. The final line, "Wow! Yeah! That was bliss!" adds a sense of immediate gratification and joy.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024

Thanks, Patty. xxx.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This was a sweet poem for the "5-7-5 romance" writing prompt. You got the syllable count right, too. The picture added to it in a good way. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024

Many thanks.