Ol' Silver and Red
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ol' Silver and Red, ch 5"Medeival Ohmie and the dragon Ol' Silver and Red
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Comment from lyenochka
Now every hero should be nice to canaries just in case, one has such a good moral upbringing to repay a kind deed. The bloodiness wasn't due to the bird or was it? I guess it kept him awake and moving?
I liked that Princess May just naturally went to a thinking rock just like Ohmie does. They are clearly meant for one another!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Now every hero should be nice to canaries just in case, one has such a good moral upbringing to repay a kind deed. The bloodiness wasn't due to the bird or was it? I guess it kept him awake and moving?
I liked that Princess May just naturally went to a thinking rock just like Ohmie does. They are clearly meant for one another!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Thank you.
I'll have to clarify. The bloody feet was from climbing the rocky wall barefoot.
I appreciate your great review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
One good deed deserves another as the yellow canary proved by keeping Ohmie awake and alive long enough to save his life. I'm surprised he didn't drown riding a dragon into the depths. I wonder if the diamond is still somewhere on his body? Good story with the princess having such a link to Ohmie that she knows he has survived.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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One good deed deserves another as the yellow canary proved by keeping Ohmie awake and alive long enough to save his life. I'm surprised he didn't drown riding a dragon into the depths. I wonder if the diamond is still somewhere on his body? Good story with the princess having such a link to Ohmie that she knows he has survived.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you so very much for your very nice review.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Wayne
So, the saga continues. I think Ohmie's going to make it because he's the star of the show.
The dragon keeps missing with him even in situations where he should not
He probably could've climbed up the shaft 20 times or more faster than ohmie.
I'm pretty sure this chapter is setting the stage for the next one when ohmie gets out of this cave. But, I guess he's still searching for the treasure. I think maybe the diamond has special powers because I don't think he's just after it for the money. It was probably explained in one of the chapters I missed why he wants us so badly.
Here. Did you mean Plummet? Plumbed does not seem right here. I think you mean plunged
" any pearl diver had ever plumbed"
Here please put a comma after late I tripped over the words
" It was. Ohmie realized almost too late that the dragon
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hi, Wayne
So, the saga continues. I think Ohmie's going to make it because he's the star of the show.
The dragon keeps missing with him even in situations where he should not
He probably could've climbed up the shaft 20 times or more faster than ohmie.
I'm pretty sure this chapter is setting the stage for the next one when ohmie gets out of this cave. But, I guess he's still searching for the treasure. I think maybe the diamond has special powers because I don't think he's just after it for the money. It was probably explained in one of the chapters I missed why he wants us so badly.
Here. Did you mean Plummet? Plumbed does not seem right here. I think you mean plunged
" any pearl diver had ever plumbed"
Here please put a comma after late I tripped over the words
" It was. Ohmie realized almost too late that the dragon
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your great review.
I tremendously appreciate your comments and suggestions.
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You are welcomed
Comment from jim vecchio
Glad I caught this while I have a six. Well done. One question: What is "bilish"? I couldn't find a definition for it. Does it apply to bile? The puking incident could have been a bit sickening but I just did the same thing myself, after ordering lunch from Wendy's. Uh-oh. Too much information!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Glad I caught this while I have a six. Well done. One question: What is "bilish"? I couldn't find a definition for it. Does it apply to bile? The puking incident could have been a bit sickening but I just did the same thing myself, after ordering lunch from Wendy's. Uh-oh. Too much information!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Ohmi-ism, bilish. Yes, you got it.
Thank you for your great review.
And thank you immensely for the six stars! Thank you.
(Hardee's burgers do that to me.) smiley face here
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Your writing is always superior. I just don't always have six stars.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This might be some of your most descriptive writing yet, I can see the vomit in chunks spewing out of Ohmie's mouth and even smell the sour. So, much that you have me imitating his gush. LOL. It's good to be back and reading. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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This might be some of your most descriptive writing yet, I can see the vomit in chunks spewing out of Ohmie's mouth and even smell the sour. So, much that you have me imitating his gush. LOL. It's good to be back and reading. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your great review!