Stages
L'arora Potlatch Club Post4 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
wow this was a great poem about living life and growing and learning
good form and smooth flow and the required rhymes worked well
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
wow this was a great poem about living life and growing and learning
good form and smooth flow and the required rhymes worked well
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thanks for such positive and encouraging comments, Shelley.
Glad you enjoyed it
Joan
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The thoughts are true but the piece can use some editing for clarity like in " Every day you and move more " and " And reap what you sow " instead of 'not to reap what you sow.'and " And gossips, how to For not" ??
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
The thoughts are true but the piece can use some editing for clarity like in " Every day you and move more " and " And reap what you sow " instead of 'not to reap what you sow.'and " And gossips, how to For not" ??
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hi Tom,
Thanks for the review and sorry about the mistakes. I have made some edits. Maybe you can reread and see if all is find now.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
I guess you used a near rhyme of "find" and "end" for the last stanza. Your poem flowed smoothly as you told the tale of a person's life from birth to grown individual raising his/her own family.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
I guess you used a near rhyme of "find" and "end" for the last stanza. Your poem flowed smoothly as you told the tale of a person's life from birth to grown individual raising his/her own family.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hi Helen,
Thanks for the review and all the stars. No find was supposed to be
fend. I made that edit and some others.
Joan
Comment from Dr. Nad
Thank you for taking the time to write a poem that chronicles the life of all human beings in all cultures. You have nicely shown us the progression from the womb to the tomb. Good job thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
Thank you for taking the time to write a poem that chronicles the life of all human beings in all cultures. You have nicely shown us the progression from the womb to the tomb. Good job thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Dan, for the nice review and the high rating. Glad you enjoyed it.
Joan
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You are most welcome Joan!