Danger is my business
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Telephone Call"Most everything Mickey did was dangerous.
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Comment from pome lover
Liz,
I am so sorry about your brother. I know that must be hard.
Also, after reading your bio, to the right, I am truly amazed at all you have been and done! What an amazing person you are! You are way up there in the FS novelist rankings!
I am guessing you taught creative writing after you were in the convent? And then a domestic violence advocate after that? Heavenly days, what stamina you must have.
It is almost midnight and my head almost hit the keys. Got to go to bed.
Katharine
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Liz,
I am so sorry about your brother. I know that must be hard.
Also, after reading your bio, to the right, I am truly amazed at all you have been and done! What an amazing person you are! You are way up there in the FS novelist rankings!
I am guessing you taught creative writing after you were in the convent? And then a domestic violence advocate after that? Heavenly days, what stamina you must have.
It is almost midnight and my head almost hit the keys. Got to go to bed.
Katharine
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your appreciative review. Oh I just noticed the shiny six, what a treat. Has my brother says. I too want to find ways to help people improve their lives and their sense of being. Thank you for your admiration. At 77, many opportunities have been afforded me.
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you are most welcome!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A boxing ring adjacent to a hospital could be a novel idea. Paragraph Two details why.
Hard situation to be in when bombarded by those who mean well, but not sure what they should say about a seriously ill person.
Distain means to discolor something. Should "much distained by his father" be much disdained by his father?
"required skills did" Perhaps the word "and" should be inserted between skills and did?
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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A boxing ring adjacent to a hospital could be a novel idea. Paragraph Two details why.
Hard situation to be in when bombarded by those who mean well, but not sure what they should say about a seriously ill person.
Distain means to discolor something. Should "much distained by his father" be much disdained by his father?
"required skills did" Perhaps the word "and" should be inserted between skills and did?
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your attentive review I have attended to those. I
Comment from nomi338
My father's condition had devolved to a state where he just slept all the time. He was even fed intravenously. When my wife and I visited him at the facility where he was staying, it broke my heart that he never even opened his eyes during out entire visit. It is impossible for me to describe the pain I felt at watching the man he gave me life and I could not even look into his eyes.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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My father's condition had devolved to a state where he just slept all the time. He was even fed intravenously. When my wife and I visited him at the facility where he was staying, it broke my heart that he never even opened his eyes during out entire visit. It is impossible for me to describe the pain I felt at watching the man he gave me life and I could not even look into his eyes.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I am so sad for your loss so difficult to watch. And now my brother has been through all the stages and done so well but now he's regressed which is terrible. Some of may be because he's 77 or what but it's just terrible to watch. Thank you for sharing your story. I don't believe we've met, I'm Liz
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I am pleased to me you Liz. I look forward to reading more posts from you. My full name is Nolan Miller. My pen name is nomi338.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Liz
It sounds like this is a true story. If it is, I'm so sorry your brother didn't recognize you. Somehow I thought maybe the person mowing the lawn was a man, but maybe it was you
Good job on the technical skills of writing
Here it should be enquire. Enquire means to ssk
"whether or not I should inquire of their loved one's present "
Hair. Did you mean disdain?
"preparation for engineering, much distained by his father. He found himself overqualified "
Here! I think AND before did
"He was afforded every opportunity to learn all required skills did have a section of instructions on climbing skills "
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Hi, Liz
It sounds like this is a true story. If it is, I'm so sorry your brother didn't recognize you. Somehow I thought maybe the person mowing the lawn was a man, but maybe it was you
Good job on the technical skills of writing
Here it should be enquire. Enquire means to ssk
"whether or not I should inquire of their loved one's present "
Hair. Did you mean disdain?
"preparation for engineering, much distained by his father. He found himself overqualified "
Here! I think AND before did
"He was afforded every opportunity to learn all required skills did have a section of instructions on climbing skills "
I enjoyed reading your book chapter
Good job. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review. I was mowing and then stopped for a while to go in and see if I could get him on the phone then when I came back out I started mowing again but couldn't do it. I was so emotionally spent.
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Hugs and smiles
Comment from BethShelby
This was a terrible accident and what was happening with he afterward has to extremely hard of family that cared about him. His work before the accident required a lot of skill and courage since it was dangerous work.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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This was a terrible accident and what was happening with he afterward has to extremely hard of family that cared about him. His work before the accident required a lot of skill and courage since it was dangerous work.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Hi Liz, you are writing a new book, yey, I admire your courage. I am not able to write more some 50 words and that just from time to time, as I am wasting my life with unimportant things.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Hi Liz, you are writing a new book, yey, I admire your courage. I am not able to write more some 50 words and that just from time to time, as I am wasting my life with unimportant things.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your involved review. 50 words is not bad. I only write I only write a thousand per chapter so you're halfway through a chapter. If you want me to look at it I'd be happy to do it.
Comment from lyenochka
As you said, the people showed how much they cared about what you were so worried about but it probably bothered you, even though you knew their intentions were good. That's a good reminder as I tend to ask about what is foremost on people's minds and maybe that could be annoying.
It's great that you are chronicling the changes as your brother recovered from his TBI. My dad was physically combative after his brain surgery. It's like the brain wants to protect itself.
I didn't know what you meant by " It turned out relating for his wife". I could understand how it was traumatic for you.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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As you said, the people showed how much they cared about what you were so worried about but it probably bothered you, even though you knew their intentions were good. That's a good reminder as I tend to ask about what is foremost on people's minds and maybe that could be annoying.
It's great that you are chronicling the changes as your brother recovered from his TBI. My dad was physically combative after his brain surgery. It's like the brain wants to protect itself.
I didn't know what you meant by " It turned out relating for his wife". I could understand how it was traumatic for you.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review. I have no idea what I meant in that phrase that you've questioned. I'll have to go check it out.
SadlyMickey is showing more signsof deterioration of the stagesI don't know if it's because these 77 or what but he is going back tostagefour and five and now he's becoming verbally inappropriate. Some of it is the kind of stuff my father used to say so I don't know if it's because he's his father's son or how at all materializes.
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That must be so hard for his wife. It sounds like a stage of Alzheimer's. Sigh.
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We're trying to get him hooked up with some people down here rather than about 3 hours away so hopefully somebody here knows about head injuries. The lady that he's been in contact with from BIA brain injured association sent him some very good paperwork so much so that he wanted me to contact her and have her send me a copy of it too.
Comment from BOO ghost
BOO is a newcomer. Reading script... Paragraph by paragraph. he was becoming increasingly inappropriate such as grabbing the nurses' breasts and clothing. Naughty boy! Reading... Watching the movie The Mission I, maybe insert a couple of commas. Little stuff. Which I miss all of the time. But mostly, well, I really don't understand why too many adverbs are frowned upon? Guess, people hate adverbs, people like Steve King, who quoted that hell is paved with adverbs! They call it purple prose. I don't make the grammar rules. I think some of the old rules need to be changed! The brother of the brother had Alzheimer's disease? Story flows smooth. Interesting story. I'm a late comer! tree huggers with guns, yeppers, they can get dangerous! Well, BOO will catcha on the next episode! BOO!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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BOO is a newcomer. Reading script... Paragraph by paragraph. he was becoming increasingly inappropriate such as grabbing the nurses' breasts and clothing. Naughty boy! Reading... Watching the movie The Mission I, maybe insert a couple of commas. Little stuff. Which I miss all of the time. But mostly, well, I really don't understand why too many adverbs are frowned upon? Guess, people hate adverbs, people like Steve King, who quoted that hell is paved with adverbs! They call it purple prose. I don't make the grammar rules. I think some of the old rules need to be changed! The brother of the brother had Alzheimer's disease? Story flows smooth. Interesting story. I'm a late comer! tree huggers with guns, yeppers, they can get dangerous! Well, BOO will catcha on the next episode! BOO!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Boo, thank you for my amusing review. Welcome to the group If there's anything I can do that help to help you out to know any of the ropes let me know and be happy to help you.
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I appreciate that!
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***Grin***
Comment from jim vecchio
Sorry, no sixes in my possession. Once more, this was a valiant piece of writing and I hope it helped you to write out the details. Be thankful he at least heard your voice. I've had many, including my wife and sister, to whom I never had the chance to say "good bye". I hope in future instillments, your brother regains some of his lost health.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Sorry, no sixes in my possession. Once more, this was a valiant piece of writing and I hope it helped you to write out the details. Be thankful he at least heard your voice. I've had many, including my wife and sister, to whom I never had the chance to say "good bye". I hope in future instillments, your brother regains some of his lost health.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review. What I'm doing in the pretty well the remained of the story is to tell what he did and how he was before his head injury he lived a very full life up until he was 40. Now it's kind of all gone to scrabble. I do daily have that gratitude even though he drives me crazy with his 12 phone calls.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I am positive this was very traumatic for you. I can't imagine it wasn't. My father was an engineer and one of my sons is an engineer. Matter of fact so is my brother. Each one of them was a different type of engineer.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I am positive this was very traumatic for you. I can't imagine it wasn't. My father was an engineer and one of my sons is an engineer. Matter of fact so is my brother. Each one of them was a different type of engineer.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your complementary review.