Unfinished Brushstrokes
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23 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Carol, This is a great entry for the Write a Book in a Month. You used great descriptive words of reality. I was so spellbound as I read each word. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Carol, This is a great entry for the Write a Book in a Month. You used great descriptive words of reality. I was so spellbound as I read each word. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thanks. Teri! I believe Unfinished Brushstrokes is my favorite story that I have ever written. I like many others but I didn't get as much enjoyment out of it. That's why I've started the second series with the same characters. Different plot but lots of fun.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Carol that was wonderful! Good for you. I am so inspired by your writing. Especially now that I know a bit more about your daily challenges. Writing provides a small bubble of joy where your imagination can bring you out of the mundane. When do you write? Where? I find sitting in the kitchen amidst my life makes it really hard to stay on track. I need a writer's nook. Unfortunately our cabin is too small and internet does not work outside...Esther
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Carol that was wonderful! Good for you. I am so inspired by your writing. Especially now that I know a bit more about your daily challenges. Writing provides a small bubble of joy where your imagination can bring you out of the mundane. When do you write? Where? I find sitting in the kitchen amidst my life makes it really hard to stay on track. I need a writer's nook. Unfortunately our cabin is too small and internet does not work outside...Esther
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hello, Esther! I have a roll top desk and my desk top in my family room with windows and french doors all around. I can see outside and the river too. Generally I write in the early morning hours and then use the afternoon to answer reviews and read. Sometimes if it's a good day, I write again. I have a ranch home in the country. With two bedrooms at one end of the house and one bedroom at the other with everythng else in the middle and connected by large openings. It was the house my father built when I was five yers old, but I have completely remodeled it because of termites. We are all good now though. And yes, dealing with my son on a 24/7 basis can get frustrating, but that's life I guess. Thanks for caring.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Hey Carol, I'm going to try really hard to get caught up and read through your story. I will probably just keep my reviews limited to any errors/improvements I see, for the sake of time. Just understand I love your writing and am not skipping the praise only because I want to be able to keep chugging through. :-)
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Repeated word, would recommend changing up one:
Heartbroken, she **faced** the abrupt and unresolved conclusion to their story.
In the quiet aftermath of her return to the United States, she **faced**the stark reality of her life.
Julie
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hey Carol, I'm going to try really hard to get caught up and read through your story. I will probably just keep my reviews limited to any errors/improvements I see, for the sake of time. Just understand I love your writing and am not skipping the praise only because I want to be able to keep chugging through. :-)
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Repeated word, would recommend changing up one:
Heartbroken, she **faced** the abrupt and unresolved conclusion to their story.
In the quiet aftermath of her return to the United States, she **faced**the stark reality of her life.
Julie
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Made a word change and I appreciate the help in sorting it out. Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, I've missed daily doses of your descriptions that touch all the senses and let me live your stories as I read along. I've never been a history or stories from the past kind of guy, preferring the present. But whatever you write moved me. Thanks for sharing. I just got back and I'm trying to catch up all that I've missed, which I'm not sure if that'll ever be possible. Hope all is well in your world! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Wow, I've missed daily doses of your descriptions that touch all the senses and let me live your stories as I read along. I've never been a history or stories from the past kind of guy, preferring the present. But whatever you write moved me. Thanks for sharing. I just got back and I'm trying to catch up all that I've missed, which I'm not sure if that'll ever be possible. Hope all is well in your world! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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It's my Sweetie! Forgive me...I was writing a pick-up scene in the next chapter and got to much into the character. LOL I am so happy to see you and know you are back safe and sound. You've missed a lot.... and were missed. I'm told this story is better than the last, but how would I know without my favorite reader to tell me so.
I'm just as crazy as ever...writing all night long.... but enjoying it so that's what counts, right?
Catch up when you can...Thanks for stopping by to say hello.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
An excellent prologue to your new book, which, I'm guessing will be a chapter a day. It was a good idea for a book. It starts with two people who meet in the center of a war, and they find a way to fall in love, or at least to connect.
Eleanor gets pregnant, but gives the baby away, Charles is shipped out, but paints a portrait of Eleanor and hopes to meet back up with her again.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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An excellent prologue to your new book, which, I'm guessing will be a chapter a day. It was a good idea for a book. It starts with two people who meet in the center of a war, and they find a way to fall in love, or at least to connect.
Eleanor gets pregnant, but gives the baby away, Charles is shipped out, but paints a portrait of Eleanor and hopes to meet back up with her again.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Glad you enjoyed the prologue.... And I see you have read several other chapters as well. I am eager to see what you thought. I'm trying to post two chapters a day for a little while so I can get caught up with the contest....and because I don't know how to stop writing. LOL
smiles, Carol
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You know, Carol, I had an idea you couldn't stop, lol!! I've been there, just not right now.
Keep on keeping on,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from tfawcus
This sets the scene well. You describe a heart wrenching situation in a believable way. There is immediate empathy with the characters. Good luck with your entry. It looks as though it will be a strong one.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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This sets the scene well. You describe a heart wrenching situation in a believable way. There is immediate empathy with the characters. Good luck with your entry. It looks as though it will be a strong one.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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I;m honored that you have taken the time to read the prologue and the three chapters. Not too many people would put that much time into the stories. I am flattered and greatly appreciative. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
A very nice setup. Well written back story. I have been doing some organization stuff today. Boring when I want to write. My brain is all sparky and I can't sit down to write. Bummer. Karen
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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A very nice setup. Well written back story. I have been doing some organization stuff today. Boring when I want to write. My brain is all sparky and I can't sit down to write. Bummer. Karen
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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thanks so much for taking your time to read my story. I know you have your hands full with trying to get settled. O appreciate it so much. Take care.
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U R Welcome. :-)
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Quite an interesting prologue.
This may well be my kind of story-I do so enjoy the thrill of romance.
The story is outlined with just enough detail to lure me in yet the promise of so much more to come.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Quite an interesting prologue.
This may well be my kind of story-I do so enjoy the thrill of romance.
The story is outlined with just enough detail to lure me in yet the promise of so much more to come.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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You are wonderful, Shirley. I can't believe how blessed I am by meeting you and seeing you enjoy my work. I hope this story strikes many chords with you - humor, love, and learning the true meaning of life. Thanks again for the review and your awesome stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Dang, woman! Your prologue already has me clamoring to dig in! I read in your replies that Eleanor is dead in Chapter one?
Oh boy!
Paranormal Mystery and Romance?
Lucky for me I have been tied up, so I have a few chapters to read!
(Hurrah for you tackling this book in a month challenge!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Dang, woman! Your prologue already has me clamoring to dig in! I read in your replies that Eleanor is dead in Chapter one?
Oh boy!
Paranormal Mystery and Romance?
Lucky for me I have been tied up, so I have a few chapters to read!
(Hurrah for you tackling this book in a month challenge!)
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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I hope I can write this story in three weeks. If I can keep my head cleared and on track I should. Always something that gets in my way...LOL
Tighten that seat belt because the train is ready to leave the station.
Smiles, Carol
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RUKM? I have no doubt you'll do it...with time to spare!
:)
Comment from lyenochka
This seems like a great background story for your book. I'm guessing now that I've read the first chapter that the two lovers will get together as ghosts? So her baby was one she had with Charles? It's sad she didn't reach out to Charles and that they didn't exchange contact information but I know, you needed that for the plot!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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This seems like a great background story for your book. I'm guessing now that I've read the first chapter that the two lovers will get together as ghosts? So her baby was one she had with Charles? It's sad she didn't reach out to Charles and that they didn't exchange contact information but I know, you needed that for the plot!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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I am sure Charles will be found within the story somewhere, but I am not telling just when and where. It is sad that they didn't connect over the years, because I believe their love lives within them forever.
Smiles, Carol