The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, as usual you've written a great continuation to the story. I was mesmerised with everything they did and subsequently discovered. I now have to hurry. I loved the scene with the love letters. Big hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Hi Carol, as usual you've written a great continuation to the story. I was mesmerised with everything they did and subsequently discovered. I now have to hurry. I loved the scene with the love letters. Big hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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I loved the love letters too. I like to add those soft touches. Breaks up the rough spots. Thanks for reading, Ulla. I truly appreciate your thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I had go agree with Benny about how much time would have been saved had the powers given William his memory back earlier. But even he recognized how much they all changed and worked on their redemption.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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Lol. I had go agree with Benny about how much time would have been saved had the powers given William his memory back earlier. But even he recognized how much they all changed and worked on their redemption.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much, Helen. They all had lessons to learn before they could find their redemption. And they did a good job of it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is another excellent chapter. Again, your descriptions are excellent and make it easy to visualize the dusty tunnels and hidden doors. I look forward to your conclusion.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. Again, your descriptions are excellent and make it easy to visualize the dusty tunnels and hidden doors. I look forward to your conclusion.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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You have two chapters to go...I hope you find it a satisfying end to the story. I appreciate all your support and kindness. Look forward to seeing what you think.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is great that they have learned to work together and now all seem to like each other. They probably wouldn't have found the "treasure" if they hadn't worked together. Sebastian's words about saving Terrance and Tony need to be in quotation marks. I'm out of 6s so will not read end tonight.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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This is great that they have learned to work together and now all seem to like each other. They probably wouldn't have found the "treasure" if they hadn't worked together. Sebastian's words about saving Terrance and Tony need to be in quotation marks. I'm out of 6s so will not read end tonight.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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Thanks for dropping in to read some of the final chapters. I am thrilled that you stuck with the story and enjoyed it. Thank you for all your support.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I think one of the most wonderful thing that one can discover is what God knew all the time, the value of every human being that ever lived, it not only brings hope, but a purpose and treasure to us all, that is worth far more than all the gems and golden treasure throughout the universe, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I think one of the most wonderful thing that one can discover is what God knew all the time, the value of every human being that ever lived, it not only brings hope, but a purpose and treasure to us all, that is worth far more than all the gems and golden treasure throughout the universe, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Roy! I think that about sums up what I hoped came across in this story: They all had a second chance to reach out to others, bond with them, learn to love, not hate, and hopefully gain from it. Thank you so much.
I didn't even see the six until I was about to send it to you. How awesome! You made it even that more special. You are always there for me and I so appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
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Bless you Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This chapter has left me with such a warm and fuzzy feeling as everyone worked together. You have put a lot of thought and work into this novel to make it as realistic as a ghost story could possibly be. All of your characters were so well developed and real, I felt like I got to know and understand them. I could feel your love for them as I read. This whole project has been an outstanding effort.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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This chapter has left me with such a warm and fuzzy feeling as everyone worked together. You have put a lot of thought and work into this novel to make it as realistic as a ghost story could possibly be. All of your characters were so well developed and real, I felt like I got to know and understand them. I could feel your love for them as I read. This whole project has been an outstanding effort.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Lorraine. I had tears running down my face trying to type as I was wrapping it up. Dumb, huh? I got so wrapped up in a story I hated in the beginning. And would you believe after writing all night and wrapping it up, I developed a new story for the contest. LOL I've gone crazy. You've got two chapters to go.... and then we start again... Hint! There might be a ghost. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Wow. In the last chapter, I wondered if the "redemption" would be intertwined with the relationships forged and healed between mortals and spirits. This chapter is SO exciting, as they work together to explore the many clues and labyrinths...and the crescendo is Sebastion appearing!
I knew your final chapters would be exquisite! Haven't they all been? I bet YOU feel transformed after this grand writing experiment in a new genre!
Bravo Carol~
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Wow. In the last chapter, I wondered if the "redemption" would be intertwined with the relationships forged and healed between mortals and spirits. This chapter is SO exciting, as they work together to explore the many clues and labyrinths...and the crescendo is Sebastion appearing!
I knew your final chapters would be exquisite! Haven't they all been? I bet YOU feel transformed after this grand writing experiment in a new genre!
Bravo Carol~
Karenina
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I got into a writing mode during the middle of the night and I couldn't stop. I was on the biggest high. The finale is ready and I hope you enjoy!
Love ya, Carol
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You're on a roll...
I can't wait to see what tomorrow brings!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The end of this post is an AAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH moment. I loved it. Thank you.
Billy and Will looked at each other and then volunteered. "We have no idea where that leads or if any trouble awaits. Let us go because we're thin and can disappear if need be." (did they say this at the same time, who's speaking here?)
While watching her glowing smile in the dimly lit cellar, Michael had a few thoughts of his own. *YES!!!!!!)
Sebastian smiled, "I know you've all faced many difficult times, (smiled.)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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The end of this post is an AAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH moment. I loved it. Thank you.
Billy and Will looked at each other and then volunteered. "We have no idea where that leads or if any trouble awaits. Let us go because we're thin and can disappear if need be." (did they say this at the same time, who's speaking here?)
While watching her glowing smile in the dimly lit cellar, Michael had a few thoughts of his own. *YES!!!!!!)
Sebastian smiled, "I know you've all faced many difficult times, (smiled.)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I haven't made these corrections yet, but when I saw your post I was so excited. I just this very minute finished the story. There's two chapters and I will post one in a little while and the final chapter tomorrow. I can't wait to hear what you think. I have never been so pleased with a story as I am with this one. Thank you again for all your support and encouragement.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Just fixed them so I wouldn't forget!
Comment from BethShelby
You have secret doors and tunnels and locks and cellars going in every direction. This place has more oddities that the Winchester mansion. I don't know had anyone had time to accumulate the treasure. it seems someone spent all their time digging tunnel sna creating secret rooms. Are we going to actually get to see what the treasure is? There has been a lot of good gone into the making of friends and working together.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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You have secret doors and tunnels and locks and cellars going in every direction. This place has more oddities that the Winchester mansion. I don't know had anyone had time to accumulate the treasure. it seems someone spent all their time digging tunnel sna creating secret rooms. Are we going to actually get to see what the treasure is? There has been a lot of good gone into the making of friends and working together.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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the mansion has been the home of ghosts in purgatory probably longer than we can ever imagine. They tunneled and built more tunnels every time new ones arrived I guess. I've written the last two chapters - one for this afternoon and the other tomorrow. Can't wait to see what everyone thinks. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
This is just a chapter review as I've not read previous chapters.
A well written, engaging and suspenseful mystery chapter.
Each paragraph builds engagement and understanding as the story unfolds.
The chapter ending is fitting and leaves me with a feel good moment.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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This is just a chapter review as I've not read previous chapters.
A well written, engaging and suspenseful mystery chapter.
Each paragraph builds engagement and understanding as the story unfolds.
The chapter ending is fitting and leaves me with a feel good moment.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Hello, Shirley.... I'm glad to took a chance and stopped by to read a chapter to my novel. I've been enjoying writing it and am thrilled when someone new loves it too. I've just finished the last two chapters and can't wait to hear what everyone thinks. I'm blown away by your review and the stars. Awesome. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You're very welcome.