Take Me Out
a free verse16 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
When I read the title of this contest entry, I immediately started singing the song, 'Take me out to the ballgame.' My husband thought I was crazy. Hmm. I enjoyed reading and have witness of a few of these events at a ball game. LOL Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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When I read the title of this contest entry, I immediately started singing the song, 'Take me out to the ballgame.' My husband thought I was crazy. Hmm. I enjoyed reading and have witness of a few of these events at a ball game. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Barbara
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sounds like you need to switch teams. Lol. I used to love watching baseball. I've seen the braves, watched little league, but my favorite was watching farm league. Colorful players and colorful fans. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Sounds like you need to switch teams. Lol. I used to love watching baseball. I've seen the braves, watched little league, but my favorite was watching farm league. Colorful players and colorful fans. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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The Detroit Tigers are breaking our hearts.
Comment from Sugarray77
I really enjoyed your creative way with words in the baseball themed poem. I am an avid baseball fan, so I appreciated your descriptive phrases. Well done, Bill.
Melissa
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I really enjoyed your creative way with words in the baseball themed poem. I am an avid baseball fan, so I appreciated your descriptive phrases. Well done, Bill.
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Melissa
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
There was some awesome word play in this poem about America's favorite past time. Nice entry for the Free Verse Poetry contest. Good luck with it..
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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There was some awesome word play in this poem about America's favorite past time. Nice entry for the Free Verse Poetry contest. Good luck with it..
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Marilyn
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The alliteration in this free verse contest entry rises it above the crowd, and fills it with energy. It really is an outstanding use of language - much enjoyed. kay
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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The alliteration in this free verse contest entry rises it above the crowd, and fills it with energy. It really is an outstanding use of language - much enjoyed. kay
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Kay
Comment from nomi338
Ho-hum. Another day at the ball park, a game that lasted well after dark. Pitches were pitched, balls were thrown, swung on, hit or missed, Pretty girls with their enthusiastic boyfriends were hurriedly kissed, lest the play of the day took place unnoticed.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Ho-hum. Another day at the ball park, a game that lasted well after dark. Pitches were pitched, balls were thrown, swung on, hit or missed, Pretty girls with their enthusiastic boyfriends were hurriedly kissed, lest the play of the day took place unnoticed.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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...and then rain came.It is as
Comment from karenina
Tis the season for baseball, and you've given us lots of alliteration to enjoy as we read your free verse offering. I liked repeating "bitter batter" from the first line. It set me up for an enjoyable experience. Best of luck.
(Go Red Sox!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Tis the season for baseball, and you've given us lots of alliteration to enjoy as we read your free verse offering. I liked repeating "bitter batter" from the first line. It set me up for an enjoyable experience. Best of luck.
(Go Red Sox!)
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Karenina. Red Sox are 3rd in AL East. Good luck to them.
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Even if I didn't live in Massachusetts I am contractually obligated as my father's daughter to ALWAYS cheer for the Red Sox!
Comment from jim vecchio
Loved this! I have especially missed going to baseball games. When in Connecticut, I attended many Yankees and Mets games and often travelled to Massachusetts to see my team, the Red Sox. Now, one of my goals is to attend a game once more. In our area, we have a team, the Jumbo Shrimp, and I would love just to sit there with a hot dog in one hand and popcorn in the other.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Loved this! I have especially missed going to baseball games. When in Connecticut, I attended many Yankees and Mets games and often travelled to Massachusetts to see my team, the Red Sox. Now, one of my goals is to attend a game once more. In our area, we have a team, the Jumbo Shrimp, and I would love just to sit there with a hot dog in one hand and popcorn in the other.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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They're playing the Nashville Sounds on Sunday.
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Wish I could be t that game!
Comment from BethShelby
I like your alliteration. I thought you were writing a tongue twister there first. Like, Betty bought a bit o butter but she said the butter's bitter. If it put it in my batter it will make my batter bitter.
You went from deep sea diving to baseball. You sport choices vary.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I like your alliteration. I thought you were writing a tongue twister there first. Like, Betty bought a bit o butter but she said the butter's bitter. If it put it in my batter it will make my batter bitter.
You went from deep sea diving to baseball. You sport choices vary.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I'm all over the place. : )
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Not just a free verse, a free verse TONGUE-TWISTER!! I loved it! No one writes these anymore, and I miss them. Very good job, with a fun story in the mix. I bet this is going to great at the polls for you! Good luck. xo
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Not just a free verse, a free verse TONGUE-TWISTER!! I loved it! No one writes these anymore, and I miss them. Very good job, with a fun story in the mix. I bet this is going to great at the polls for you! Good luck. xo
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle. Maybe this will get the Detroit Tigers moving again.
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Fingers (um PAWS?) crossed!