The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from BethShelby
I'm surprised that Patrick disappeared after all those words of encouragement he gave telling her she would be all right. It sounds like she have found her self in a spot she never expected to be.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I'm surprised that Patrick disappeared after all those words of encouragement he gave telling her she would be all right. It sounds like she have found her self in a spot she never expected to be.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I think Patrick was a bit overwhelmed at returning as an earthy being if only for 24 hours.... but in the end, I think he will come through for Sandra. As for the next new character... he has you to thank for his existence. LOl Tossed Michael in just for you. Hope you enjoy because I think he will. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Poor Sandra! Did Patrick have to go to the little ghosts room? (A little attempt at humor)
Darn it! I thought this part would go smoothly!
Hmmm.
Well...
I'm betting on Patrick coming through.
After all, Sebastian has his hands full at the mansion!
Onward!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Poor Sandra! Did Patrick have to go to the little ghosts room? (A little attempt at humor)
Darn it! I thought this part would go smoothly!
Hmmm.
Well...
I'm betting on Patrick coming through.
After all, Sebastian has his hands full at the mansion!
Onward!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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He had to go somewhere... and I hope he's not in trouble. Sandra's got enough on her hands. Of course, he got arrested, he'd just have to vanish ...up in a puff of smoke like a ghost or something. LOL Wouldn't that be a story for the newspaper. LOL
Smiles
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If anybody can pull this off...
Yup.
It's you!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The great plan is off the tracks after only a few hours. Where has Patrick gone? He was supposed to help her. Sandra is in a bad position as the policeman who has arrested her isn't the one who was supposed to show up. I wonder if she even knows what Partick's grandson looks like?
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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The great plan is off the tracks after only a few hours. Where has Patrick gone? He was supposed to help her. Sandra is in a bad position as the policeman who has arrested her isn't the one who was supposed to show up. I wonder if she even knows what Partick's grandson looks like?
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Yup, the best laid plans never seem to unfold just the way we thought...especially in one of my stories, LOL Thaks for reading and enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Oh no. Not what I was expecting at the end. Seems as if the plan has fallen apart but I am sure you have something in mind. Nothing is coming easy or predictably! Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Oh no. Not what I was expecting at the end. Seems as if the plan has fallen apart but I am sure you have something in mind. Nothing is coming easy or predictably! Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Yes, someone is getting in the way of their plan, but then it wouldn't be one of my stories unless it did, right? Thanks for reading and reviewing, Wendy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Oh no! Things were going great in the car as Sandra and Patrick drove to the city. I enjoyed the description of the tree's disappearance along with the ghostly bodies. Now what? Why didn't Patrick stay with Sandra? I love the suspense of it all. Can't wait to see what happens.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Oh no! Things were going great in the car as Sandra and Patrick drove to the city. I enjoyed the description of the tree's disappearance along with the ghostly bodies. Now what? Why didn't Patrick stay with Sandra? I love the suspense of it all. Can't wait to see what happens.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I am glad to liked the drive scene. Just needed a little humor to the story now and then at the ghosts expense preferably. As for Patrick, I fear the first chance of walking around in a mortal body once again might have went to his head...guess we wait and see. Thanks as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Mighty huge risk he is taking "his chance at salvation."
"What could go wrong?" A loaded question and certain foreshadowing of plenty going awry.
"reaching out like skeletal fingers" paints quite an illusion of the tree branches.
Some friend and help Patrick turned out to be.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Mighty huge risk he is taking "his chance at salvation."
"What could go wrong?" A loaded question and certain foreshadowing of plenty going awry.
"reaching out like skeletal fingers" paints quite an illusion of the tree branches.
Some friend and help Patrick turned out to be.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Hello, Brett..... How wonderful to see a new face reading and hopefully enjoying my efforts at a ghost story with a few twists. Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate it very much. Don't give up on Patrick just yet....He got a little twisted being "alive in the city" for the first time, but I think he will redeem himself. Thanks again!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
So, what next? You must have some kind of a plan here, but you have lost me at this point. I have no idea what direction you intend to go with the story. That's what makes good writing. Leave the reader guessing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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So, what next? You must have some kind of a plan here, but you have lost me at this point. I have no idea what direction you intend to go with the story. That's what makes good writing. Leave the reader guessing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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You're not giving up on me now, are you, April? Sandra's in a tight spot, but she'll work it out. We can't let those gangsters win, right? There's a plan...we just have to put the pieces together.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I loved the fact that Patrick, grandfather to Jack, the cop, helped her by telling her to gun the car through the spectral figures on the road, and obviously a deceased tree to boot, but on breaking into an office and rifling through documents, she had been arrested, and no sign of Patrick, well done Carol, great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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I loved the fact that Patrick, grandfather to Jack, the cop, helped her by telling her to gun the car through the spectral figures on the road, and obviously a deceased tree to boot, but on breaking into an office and rifling through documents, she had been arrested, and no sign of Patrick, well done Carol, great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Patrick might have gotten a bit distrated with his first adventure back into town but I am sure he will come through in the end. Fingers crossed!
Smiles, Carol
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I?m sure
Comment from lyenochka
Great car driving scene and interaction between Patrick and Sandra. I'm sure that Patrick will show up just in time to convince the arresting officer that everything is good.
Sorry, I can't keep up with all the chapters as more guests are arriving tonight.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Great car driving scene and interaction between Patrick and Sandra. I'm sure that Patrick will show up just in time to convince the arresting officer that everything is good.
Sorry, I can't keep up with all the chapters as more guests are arriving tonight.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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thanks Helen! I hoped that the scene came across as exciting and believable. Patrick might have gotten a little lost on his first adventure back into town, but I am sure he will come through in the end.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Carol
There have been some interesting developments in this chapter
I did not know Patrick was a ghost until I read this chapter. In your cast of characters, you mention Sergeant Patrick O'Reilly. But you don't say he's a ghost. Perhaps you establish that in previous chapters but I only returned to fan story last month so I have been here six weeks.
Suggestion. Add the fact that he's a ghost to the cast characters.
Poor Sandra. She's gotten herself into quite the pickle hasn't she? I guess we'll find out in the next chapter how she gets out of it. Patrick probably had a good reason for letting her get caught. It might've been part of their plan from the beginning.
I didn't look super hard for errors. But as I went along, I did not find any.
I really enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Hi, Carol
There have been some interesting developments in this chapter
I did not know Patrick was a ghost until I read this chapter. In your cast of characters, you mention Sergeant Patrick O'Reilly. But you don't say he's a ghost. Perhaps you establish that in previous chapters but I only returned to fan story last month so I have been here six weeks.
Suggestion. Add the fact that he's a ghost to the cast characters.
Poor Sandra. She's gotten herself into quite the pickle hasn't she? I guess we'll find out in the next chapter how she gets out of it. Patrick probably had a good reason for letting her get caught. It might've been part of their plan from the beginning.
I didn't look super hard for errors. But as I went along, I did not find any.
I really enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Pam for the review and for pointing about that I hadn't listed Patrick as a ghost. I corrected it right away. Glad you enjoyed the chapter and I hope you will continue to follow. We're getting into some exciting stuff as the story begins to wrap up. Everyone is looking for the treasure and there's no telling who will find it first. It could mean bad things for the people in the mansion if the gangsters find it first. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol