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A Mysterious Inheritance and Murders

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Comment from karenina
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Why am I not surprised that faith would drive those demons away?

Sebastian better be hanging around me tonight because that Ballroom scene will have be leaving my bedside light on!

Too cool for school, brilliant writer.

Italian

The boot!

(Should I say just one more or have I lost all credibility?)

Fifty million stars!

(Tom can't give us enough to cover a marathon journey through your masterful chapters!)

Karenina

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
    Just having you reading and enjoying my story is thrill enough. I thought if you bookmarked it or went away, I'd never have my sounding board around and it rattled me a bit. I am so happy that you are here with me, and of course, enjoying the story.
    Hugs
reply by karenina on 27-Jun-2024
    I'm loving the story... I agree with those that have mentioned it would make a great movie!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi, just letting you know I haven't forgotten you. I'm just, as usual, dismally behind. I'm not reading this yet, because I'm going back to where I left off in a little bit. Still, didn't want you to feel forgotten,

Hugs,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
    Thanks a lot! I always appreciate knowing you are still on top of the story. Have a great day!
    Smiles. Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Wow, that was a thriller!! That scene in the ballroom was horrific! I wouldn't have liked to have been in that room, at least Sebastian was able to help and they all got out. You have an amazing imagination, my friend. Now to sort out this last clue! I'm wondering what it will bring out. I'm so glad William is awake, now hopefully he will be able to help them. Loved this one, I think we are nearly there. Love and hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxxx

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
    My little ole brain has been firing on all cylinders this morning, and I think I still have a few surprises up my sleeve as they track down the clues and hopefully find the treasure. I thought it was just a treasure hunt for the ending, but of course, that seems too bland for me. LOL. I hope you enjoy it!

    And thanks for the lovely stars and all your support. You make me smile from ear to ear. Love you as always, Carol
Comment from Sally Law
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Wow! This did not let up from start to finish. Those demons are baddies and must be cast out. I have had experience with them and they only leave in Jesus' name. They might make a fuss when they go, but go they must.

The treasure map is an interesting find in this chapter. I look forward to solving the mystery.
Great writing, my dear. Not a flaw to be found!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal Xoxo

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
    Thank you so much for stopping by today and reading one of the chapters. I appreciate all the friendship I can get these days. And I always appreciate your thoughts on a mystery and of course, I needed Sebastian to stop the demons.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Sebastian is the super star and hero of this chapter. Wish the heavenly power granted him by God, he was able to quieten the demons with his light, and cause them to retreat. I enjoyed your descriptions of the demon's last efforts and the crumbling of the ballroom. Now the team can pursue clues leading to the treasure.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
    Good morning, Lorraine...Yes, now the search can begin and soon they shall all be granted redemption and be joined together in a happier place....or at least I hope so. Thanks so much for your thoughts.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
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Sebastian managed to chase the hissing, snarling away, causing them to finally retreat in the light of the authority given to him through Christ and special dispensation granted by God, this is a great episode Carol, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
    Thanks, Roy. I hope I didn't overplay Sebastian, but in my heart, I believe that his power of one, though struggling, could fight off all the demons. thanks so much for the kind review.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by royowen on 17-Jun-2024
    Most welcome
Comment from Wendy G
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Sebastian, then, represents the saving powerful figure of Jesus, the One who has power over demons. It seems the others are working well together, and things will soon move to the final climactic end. Well written.
Wendy

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
    Thanks, Wendy...I am happy to leave the demons behind and enter into a treasure hunt instead with the hopes of redemption and eternal happiness for all. Sebastian was great!
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
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I like how you have the team progressing and even putting their heads together deciphering a note in Italian. These kinds of details are the fun parts of a mystery. I hope the warfare with the demons is behind them.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
    I believe we have left them behind, Helen. I'm tired of those beasts waking me in the middle of the night with thoughts of how they can proceed. I prefer a good treasure hunt instead.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
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This is getting better all the time. I loved the battle with the demons and the final outcome. I believe you will give this story a happy ending for everyone. Good work.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
    Good morning, April. What's a story without a happy ending, right? It can go wrong over and over, but in the end...the sun has to shine. thanks so much for the review. Hope all is well with you.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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After all the screaming and flying dust and plaster, Victoria is gone and they can work together as a group. Fortunately, his grandfather had made Billy learn Italian and they now think they are on the right track to finding the treasure. Good logical way to send the story after all the confusion and anger.

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 Comment Written 16-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
    I'm still choking from all the dust and shivering in my boots from those demons, but I am happy to put them behind me now and continue with the treasure hunt. Thank you, Carol for enjoying.
    Smiles, Carol