The Small Brown Wren
beauty in the eyes of the beholder10 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Two for the price of one - a story and some poetry. This cleverly portrays the little brown wren, not as a flashy bejeweled creature but still beautiful in her simplicity and brown color. An imaginative and charming take on the contest prompt. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Two for the price of one - a story and some poetry. This cleverly portrays the little brown wren, not as a flashy bejeweled creature but still beautiful in her simplicity and brown color. An imaginative and charming take on the contest prompt. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank yo very much, Debbie, for a great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, The Small Brown Wren, turns out to be a morality tale that is as powerful as any other. The world judges bad or good on a whim, but love is real and felt from those who are closest to us.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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This story, The Small Brown Wren, turns out to be a morality tale that is as powerful as any other. The world judges bad or good on a whim, but love is real and felt from those who are closest to us.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your kind review and your understanding of the poem's theme.
Comment from Wendy G
Very nice, with your combination of prose and poetry. It ixx so pleasing that beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Well written. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Very nice, with your combination of prose and poetry. It ixx so pleasing that beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Well written. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much for your kind review and your wishes for the contest.
Comment from Ulla
Yes, this appealed to.my imagination..I could just visualise it. It is great entry for the contest. Thank you for sharing, and all the best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Yes, this appealed to.my imagination..I could just visualise it. It is great entry for the contest. Thank you for sharing, and all the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Thank you for a delightful review and your good luck wishes! I'm so glad it appealed to your imagination. I had been discouraged lately,feeling like my creative juices had dried up.
Comment from Sallyo
Aww, the power of the eyes of love. This is a charming little fable and it incorporates the verse in an organic fashion. Have you considered doing a collection of fables? You do the form so well.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Aww, the power of the eyes of love. This is a charming little fable and it incorporates the verse in an organic fashion. Have you considered doing a collection of fables? You do the form so well.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review. I'd been going through a "dry spell" and was delighted to get an idea for this contest. I'll keep hoping for more ideas!
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This poem is perfect for this contest entry! This appeared to be a hard challenge, but you nailed it! It shows that you don't have to be done up all fancy to be loved. You are loved for how you are. Nice one!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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This poem is perfect for this contest entry! This appeared to be a hard challenge, but you nailed it! It shows that you don't have to be done up all fancy to be loved. You are loved for how you are. Nice one!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Thank you for a wonderful review. I love your summation of the poem's purpose. Right on!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a delightful entry, both in terms of form and content. I especially enjoyed the way you shifted between poem and prose, it worked very well. kay
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This is a delightful entry, both in terms of form and content. I especially enjoyed the way you shifted between poem and prose, it worked very well. kay
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you for a wonderful review. I greatly appreciate it.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
That's would also be a good entry for the children's first contest.
I could see somebody reading this to a child to show that the outside of the bird is not what counts It's the inside
I'm pretty sure her mate was gaily covered enough for both of them
I enjoyed reading your poem about the little brown wren. I have a little plant that I put by the window inside my house. It has bright red blossom. So, I think it was a little brown wren who kept pecking at the window in an effort to get to my red flowers. She tried three times.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
That's would also be a good entry for the children's first contest.
I could see somebody reading this to a child to show that the outside of the bird is not what counts It's the inside
I'm pretty sure her mate was gaily covered enough for both of them
I enjoyed reading your poem about the little brown wren. I have a little plant that I put by the window inside my house. It has bright red blossom. So, I think it was a little brown wren who kept pecking at the window in an effort to get to my red flowers. She tried three times.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you for a great review. We have a "cowbird" that pecks at our window to get in. She's not as pretty as our little wrens.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a beautiful story about a plain bird who tried to look pretty but it was short lived. Yes. It's a metaphor for the superficial beauty that will only last for a short time. It's the inner beautify that really counts. Wrens can sing beautiful songs, though.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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What a beautiful story about a plain bird who tried to look pretty but it was short lived. Yes. It's a metaphor for the superficial beauty that will only last for a short time. It's the inner beautify that really counts. Wrens can sing beautiful songs, though.
Excellent.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you for a lovely review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Erika Whittle
I really like that you made the birds narratives into poems. It's a nice touch. I feel like this wasn't done on purpose but your paragraphs are divided mid sentence and it makes it a tad hard to read. Overall good story
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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I really like that you made the birds narratives into poems. It's a nice touch. I feel like this wasn't done on purpose but your paragraphs are divided mid sentence and it makes it a tad hard to read. Overall good story
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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I tried a couple of ways to fix the presentation the way I had written it, but it was changed every time to fit beside the picture!
But thank you for the lovely review!
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Oh that's unfortunate. Your welcome :)