Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi, TPAC

I think much of this is repeated. What can I say? There is a lot wrong. I need to find out from you if you want me to ignore it or give you suggestions for improvement. I will do as you wish

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I went to high school, bent facts, then, graduated me in two years, it past affairs, history, present account not alive; not even mentioned: detailing that fallen event."

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024

I see your point, my aimed intent, trying to convey its present: absent. Any help is appreciated. Thanks for your interests: and super rate despite.

Comment from Nicole Schmidt

Excellent

Our concerns to, about tiny things that we face, periods with dealt bad, entanglements, feeling doubts, prevailing, cases it is, which exist; seek ace for its real: to surface truth.


Strong

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024

Just puzzled about these freak occurrences, which occurred throughout my life: hair raising experiences. Thanking you for your great rate.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Your poem is written strangely. It wanders around from one subject to another. I can understand what you are trying to convey, but I found it quite different. I'm sure that was your intent. Nice work.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024

Being not norm, is great, yet to feel the actual intent is more appealing. Thanking you for your kind rate: despite.