DUEL with the DEVIL
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
B oy thi sucker really sped by me. I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
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B oy thi sucker really sped by me. I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an interesting beginning, with a character totally different from the main character in your previous novel. However, this is shaping up to be a story about growth and development, or deterioration, based on the prologue. I look forward to seeing what the next chapters bring.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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This is an interesting beginning, with a character totally different from the main character in your previous novel. However, this is shaping up to be a story about growth and development, or deterioration, based on the prologue. I look forward to seeing what the next chapters bring.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Yes, it's a little difficult at this point to see how we get from here to there, but we are soon to see the genesis of it.
Maybe it will be about both: deterioration and then growth and development.
Comment from Thesis
I will be following this book. It sounds almost too good to be true that the siblings are getting along after such a tragedy, however, the age difference plays a big part here. She is in control, and it sounds like (deep down inside) he knows she has to be. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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I will be following this book. It sounds almost too good to be true that the siblings are getting along after such a tragedy, however, the age difference plays a big part here. She is in control, and it sounds like (deep down inside) he knows she has to be. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Great, I'm glad it's caught your interest. Did I read somewhere you have a law enforcement background? I may have a few questions for you when I start writing part 2, as I'm anticipating several chapters involving the police then.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Jim,
boy, what a challenge for Fran. Not only is she trying to maintain a household, and make sure her brother is taken care of, as well as herself, she has to deal with the whole selfishness issue. Its good to see that Brian is starting to cooperate. Fran could take the easy way out, like happens all too often in this country, and just leave, but she has her head together. It will be interesting to see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Hello Jim,
boy, what a challenge for Fran. Not only is she trying to maintain a household, and make sure her brother is taken care of, as well as herself, she has to deal with the whole selfishness issue. Its good to see that Brian is starting to cooperate. Fran could take the easy way out, like happens all too often in this country, and just leave, but she has her head together. It will be interesting to see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Tom. Brian is lucky to have such a responsible big sister. He will come to realize that later, because he will certainly need her help in a number of ways.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is shaping up to be an interesting story. The boy was behaving like a lot of kids who don't have enough to do and want to be babied. It was hard for the sister to lower the boom, but the exercises were the best thing she could have done. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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This is shaping up to be an interesting story. The boy was behaving like a lot of kids who don't have enough to do and want to be babied. It was hard for the sister to lower the boom, but the exercises were the best thing she could have done. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Thanks very much, Carol. At least that's one good habit he develops. There will be several very destructive ones in his life.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Pam the fitness trainer here:-) You don't turn "fat into muscle" - you could say you were losing the fat and building the muscle.
I feel for these two, on their own and trying to lead ordinary lives. But Fran has got to tire at some point, and Brian needs to be pushed, like any kid his age. It will be interesting to see how this develops. Plus, they need money!
A good chapter, Jim, in what is shaping up to be a good book.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Pam the fitness trainer here:-) You don't turn "fat into muscle" - you could say you were losing the fat and building the muscle.
I feel for these two, on their own and trying to lead ordinary lives. But Fran has got to tire at some point, and Brian needs to be pushed, like any kid his age. It will be interesting to see how this develops. Plus, they need money!
A good chapter, Jim, in what is shaping up to be a good book.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Thanks very much, Pam. I really appreciate those 6 starts. A certain dynamic develops between these two, which will carry right into adulthood. He very much needs her to keep him grounded and act as his conscience.
Good point about fat and muscle. I changed it.
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray for Fran! Everyone needs a sibling like her! And good for Brian to actually get on board with the new fitness routine and realize the need to be a better person.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Hooray for Fran! Everyone needs a sibling like her! And good for Brian to actually get on board with the new fitness routine and realize the need to be a better person.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Yep, he takes what she said to heart and comes to actually enjoy it. She's a good influence on him, and this dynamic continues through much of the story.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I could really visualise Brian and Fran throughout this chapter, as she stood her ground and pulled him into line. The early morning exercise can become addictive, even enjoyable as Brian is realising. Good chapter jim.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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I could really visualise Brian and Fran throughout this chapter, as she stood her ground and pulled him into line. The early morning exercise can become addictive, even enjoyable as Brian is realising. Good chapter jim.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Thanks very much, Valda. An addiction, but a good addiction it becomes for him.
Comment from Carol Clark2
I'm glad to see Brian is responding well to Fran's laying down the law about living on junk food and hiding out on the computer. I hope her influence continues to guide him well. Good dialogue between the two characters helps us get to know them well.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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I'm glad to see Brian is responding well to Fran's laying down the law about living on junk food and hiding out on the computer. I hope her influence continues to guide him well. Good dialogue between the two characters helps us get to know them well.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Carol. She's a good big sister, and he's going to need her throughout the story to get him on the right track.
Comment from BethShelby
Maybe I missed reading one post, I'll have to go back and see. I thought you were starting a book about a drug you were taking that made you feel really good but you were going to throw away the equipment you used to make it and try to make your way back. Did I dream that? This is a good story. The dialogue sound very real between brother and sister.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Maybe I missed reading one post, I'll have to go back and see. I thought you were starting a book about a drug you were taking that made you feel really good but you were going to throw away the equipment you used to make it and try to make your way back. Did I dream that? This is a good story. The dialogue sound very real between brother and sister.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Beth. No, you didn't dream it. That was in the prologue in the present.This is the story of his past and how he got to the point of how we saw him in the prologue. That's the subject of part 1. Part 2 will be about where he goes from there.