When my son calls
One thing I look forward to.31 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
o wonderful that he calls each night to check on you. That father-son bond of love is a strong one, and beautiful. Nicely written. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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o wonderful that he calls each night to check on you. That father-son bond of love is a strong one, and beautiful. Nicely written. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It's short and very sweet. And that's all you're asked for. Clearly a loving father-son relationship captured so effectively here in succinct 4-line form. Well done, Willie, and good luck! Debbie
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It's short and very sweet. And that's all you're asked for. Clearly a loving father-son relationship captured so effectively here in succinct 4-line form. Well done, Willie, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Ulla
Aw, I can so well understand that, Willie. Nothing warms more than hearing those words from our children. I know what you mean.
You've written a love poem for the contest. Good luck. Ulla:)))
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Aw, I can so well understand that, Willie. Nothing warms more than hearing those words from our children. I know what you mean.
You've written a love poem for the contest. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Katiemae1977
Gave yourself some credit Willie for raising such a wonderful son.
This is an excellent 4 line poem for the contest. I have a feeling it will do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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Gave yourself some credit Willie for raising such a wonderful son.
This is an excellent 4 line poem for the contest. I have a feeling it will do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What a nice poem. Our family members mean a lot to us. It is so nice that he calls you every day to check on you. It shows he really cares. Good luck in tge contest.
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What a nice poem. Our family members mean a lot to us. It is so nice that he calls you every day to check on you. It shows he really cares. Good luck in tge contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from Sue Smith
This is very clever use of the four lines. You've managed to convey a lot in a small space. It reminds me of the famous (and very sad) flash fiction piece 'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. The only place I hesitated in your piece was the second line, because I stopped and wonder if you really 'get' glad. For me it would work better if it said 'But am always glad.' But that's a very minor point in a very touching piece
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This is very clever use of the four lines. You've managed to convey a lot in a small space. It reminds me of the famous (and very sad) flash fiction piece 'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. The only place I hesitated in your piece was the second line, because I stopped and wonder if you really 'get' glad. For me it would work better if it said 'But am always glad.' But that's a very minor point in a very touching piece
Comment Written 10-Sep-2024
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great four-line poem about the love between a dad and his son. It sounds like your son is a great guy, the picture makes it seem like he is in the navy. My wife retired from the Army as a MI officer, I retired from the State Department as a Foreign Service Officer.
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great four-line poem about the love between a dad and his son. It sounds like your son is a great guy, the picture makes it seem like he is in the navy. My wife retired from the Army as a MI officer, I retired from the State Department as a Foreign Service Officer.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
Comment from Colorado Owl
What a blessing it is to have a son that calls you every day! You must have raised him right. He's obviously grateful for your nurturing and support. Your poem is straight to the point.
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What a blessing it is to have a son that calls you every day! You must have raised him right. He's obviously grateful for your nurturing and support. Your poem is straight to the point.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your poem expresses your feelings when your son calls. But the story in your notes demonstrates your son's concern and love for you. My daughter lives several states away from me and her father. She calls us every day to check on us. We have great, caring children. Best wishes in the poem contest.
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Your poem expresses your feelings when your son calls. But the story in your notes demonstrates your son's concern and love for you. My daughter lives several states away from me and her father. She calls us every day to check on us. We have great, caring children. Best wishes in the poem contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
Comment from jessizero
This is such a sweet four-line poem for the contest! I loved your rhymes, and the sentiment was wonderful. You are blessed to have this love in your life. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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This is such a sweet four-line poem for the contest! I loved your rhymes, and the sentiment was wonderful. You are blessed to have this love in your life. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024