Sea Breathes
Sedoka Poem5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This sedoka, Sea Breathes, has the proper formatting and finds the engaging draw of the surf presenting itself far into the shore just as the body approaches.
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This sedoka, Sea Breathes, has the proper formatting and finds the engaging draw of the surf presenting itself far into the shore just as the body approaches.
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
There is something uniquely amazing about speaking about being by the water. You just can't beat it. This is a lovely poem and I enjoyed it. Good luck moving forward with your work.
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There is something uniquely amazing about speaking about being by the water. You just can't beat it. This is a lovely poem and I enjoyed it. Good luck moving forward with your work.
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi. This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!
Squelch means the noise you make slogging through mud. It does not seem appropriate where you used it. It is a verb.
I am confused about this contest. Yours is the second poem I've seen where the last line is more than five syllables. It says in the prompt that it should be 5-7-5. So, why does your last line have more than five syllables? The other guy said it should be -5-7-7. But the prompt listed here says 5-5-7 Something is wrong. I think you should find out what is going on. Here is what it says here about the contest you entered but the examples he gave are in the 5-7-7 format.
Writing Prompt
For this challenge you will write a sedoka.
This is a Japanese form that consists of two unrhymed poems that MAY show the same scene from two different perspectives or angles.
Each one has a syllable count of 5/5/7
Great job. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Hi. This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!
Squelch means the noise you make slogging through mud. It does not seem appropriate where you used it. It is a verb.
I am confused about this contest. Yours is the second poem I've seen where the last line is more than five syllables. It says in the prompt that it should be 5-7-5. So, why does your last line have more than five syllables? The other guy said it should be -5-7-7. But the prompt listed here says 5-5-7 Something is wrong. I think you should find out what is going on. Here is what it says here about the contest you entered but the examples he gave are in the 5-7-7 format.
Writing Prompt
For this challenge you will write a sedoka.
This is a Japanese form that consists of two unrhymed poems that MAY show the same scene from two different perspectives or angles.
Each one has a syllable count of 5/5/7
Great job. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Thanks for your review. There have been previous inquiries re this contest. There was a mistake made that somehow can't be corrected. The author does state that the correct sequence for a sedoka poem is 5-7-7.
Comment from jessizero
I liked the relationship between these two poems. I think you did a good job with the sedoka prompt. Thank you for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
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I liked the relationship between these two poems. I think you did a good job with the sedoka prompt. Thank you for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 30-May-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is an excellent entry for the Sedoka poem writing prompt. The required criteria has been met. Nice descriptive phrases. Thank you for sharing. good luck in the contest.
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This is an excellent entry for the Sedoka poem writing prompt. The required criteria has been met. Nice descriptive phrases. Thank you for sharing. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2024
