Grandma's Fortune
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Comment from zanya
This is a captivating read, draws the reader in and even, ultimately has a 'happy ending' which is not often the case these days!! Wonder what happened next ?
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This is a captivating read, draws the reader in and even, ultimately has a 'happy ending' which is not often the case these days!! Wonder what happened next ?
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, I wondered where your story was going in the beginning with all the nausea which, I must admit, left me feeling quite ill!! But well expressed and quite amusing as well as she tried to read the letter. As the story developed the implications of the inheritance became ever clearer and, while, at first, pretty untenable, the fact that the two women had so much in common clinched the deal. This story was well structured within a very readable word count with a message that, with sufficient support and incentive, we can turn our lives around to help, not just ourselves, but also others. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Well, I wondered where your story was going in the beginning with all the nausea which, I must admit, left me feeling quite ill!! But well expressed and quite amusing as well as she tried to read the letter. As the story developed the implications of the inheritance became ever clearer and, while, at first, pretty untenable, the fact that the two women had so much in common clinched the deal. This story was well structured within a very readable word count with a message that, with sufficient support and incentive, we can turn our lives around to help, not just ourselves, but also others. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
Comment from Scarbrems
That's me on the rare occasion I drink, which is why I don't now, lol.
I liked your interpretation of the scenario. The conditions of the will actually came from a positive place, which I found charming.
It's a good thing that I want to know what happens next. A sign of good writing.
The F word doesn't need a capital letter.
Good luck in the contest
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That's me on the rare occasion I drink, which is why I don't now, lol.
I liked your interpretation of the scenario. The conditions of the will actually came from a positive place, which I found charming.
It's a good thing that I want to know what happens next. A sign of good writing.
The F word doesn't need a capital letter.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
Comment from Begin Again
This is a new version of From Rags to Riches or Out of the Sewer and into the Mansion. I hope it works, and she kicks the habit and helps others. Wouldn't that be wonderful?
Smiles, Carol
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This is a new version of From Rags to Riches or Out of the Sewer and into the Mansion. I hope it works, and she kicks the habit and helps others. Wouldn't that be wonderful?
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
Comment from joann r romei
If this could only be every addicts salvation, with 5.6 billion the character could open a rehab center and help other addicts, great story for the prompt.
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If this could only be every addicts salvation, with 5.6 billion the character could open a rehab center and help other addicts, great story for the prompt.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
"She had class, while all I had was a self-destructive addiction to bad boys, alcohol, and abuse."
Ouch! I felt this. At least I used to. Good imagery. I enjoyed the read.
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"She had class, while all I had was a self-destructive addiction to bad boys, alcohol, and abuse."
Ouch! I felt this. At least I used to. Good imagery. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from EeanBlack
It's sad to think that so many women may even need help. Equity over equality. That's the American way. That's the way of the world. Let's not even mention gender equality. Good story.
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It's sad to think that so many women may even need help. Equity over equality. That's the American way. That's the way of the world. Let's not even mention gender equality. Good story.
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from bob cullen
Wow, this is so good, and so deserving of six stars, but they are all gone. All I want to do now, is read more about this young woman. Is there more to read, an entire novel perhaps. I believe this story has enormous potential, both in print form and as a tear-jerking movie.
Judging on this, Ms Sullivan, you are one talented writer.
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Wow, this is so good, and so deserving of six stars, but they are all gone. All I want to do now, is read more about this young woman. Is there more to read, an entire novel perhaps. I believe this story has enormous potential, both in print form and as a tear-jerking movie.
Judging on this, Ms Sullivan, you are one talented writer.
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from Wendy G
Very well written, engaging and engrossing. I am sure she will turn her own life around, as well as the lives of many others. You handled the prompt very effectively and I wish you good luck for the contest.
Wendy
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Very well written, engaging and engrossing. I am sure she will turn her own life around, as well as the lives of many others. You handled the prompt very effectively and I wish you good luck for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
Heck, I'd stop bingeing ice cream for five DOLLARS, let alone five billion. (Oh, BTW 'billion' and 'dollars' do not require caps)
She didn't want me to tell... - needs opening quotes
Do you think this is something you can do?" -m needs opening quotes
Tearfully, I answered, It would be my honor - lower case 'it'
Best wishes.
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Well written.
Heck, I'd stop bingeing ice cream for five DOLLARS, let alone five billion. (Oh, BTW 'billion' and 'dollars' do not require caps)
She didn't want me to tell... - needs opening quotes
Do you think this is something you can do?" -m needs opening quotes
Tearfully, I answered, It would be my honor - lower case 'it'
Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-May-2024
