On The Street Where You Live
A Love I'll Never Know28 total reviews
Comment from Terry Reilly
Loved it, Jim. Very powerful story-telling. Cleverly conceptualised and beautifully and effectively expressed. Many congratulations. Best wishes, Terry.
  |
Loved it, Jim. Very powerful story-telling. Cleverly conceptualised and beautifully and effectively expressed. Many congratulations. Best wishes, Terry.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
Comment from Scarbrems
A very tender story. I was willing him to talk to Cyndi, and the reason he felt he couldn't at the end got me in the feels. Great writing.
One note
'Routine done pat'- done should be down unless it's a US regional variant of the phrase.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
A very tender story. I was willing him to talk to Cyndi, and the reason he felt he couldn't at the end got me in the feels. Great writing.
One note
'Routine done pat'- done should be down unless it's a US regional variant of the phrase.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
Thank you so much. I will correct the typo.
Comment from Sanku
The last line was poignant . I was wondering why he didn't even try to talk to her.. Wars are badnI hopeone day all thiswould end and no one will pull a trigger.. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
 |
The last line was poignant . I was wondering why he didn't even try to talk to her.. Wars are badnI hopeone day all thiswould end and no one will pull a trigger.. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
I'm thankful for your very kind words.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Good heavens! You got me there, as I never expected the ending. Anzio was a cruel place for this soldier, and I'm glad he had a touchstone to get him through the hard times.
You did a really good job here of telling a shy man's story of unrequited love.
If you want to get rid of the strange white shadow behind your words, go to edit document, highlight all the text, then on the far right side of the bar there's a background choice; click what's in the top box - I think it says "traditional". That should do it.
Take care, and good luck.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
Good heavens! You got me there, as I never expected the ending. Anzio was a cruel place for this soldier, and I'm glad he had a touchstone to get him through the hard times.
You did a really good job here of telling a shy man's story of unrequited love.
If you want to get rid of the strange white shadow behind your words, go to edit document, highlight all the text, then on the far right side of the bar there's a background choice; click what's in the top box - I think it says "traditional". That should do it.
Take care, and good luck.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
Thank you so much! I learn something every day here!
-
Thank you so much! I learn something every day here!
Comment from nomi338
War robbed our brave warriors of many things, peace of mind, nights wehere sleep comes easily, calmness at the sudden sound of a loud bang. There are so many things war robbed our guys of, limbs that are whole and work just fine are among the many. Unfortunately there is an even more awful thief than warfare, it is the uncertainty the holds us back from taking the bold step to say to someone we are interested in and satating our feelings, risking it all. I would much rather hear no, than to spend the rest of my days wondering what if.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
War robbed our brave warriors of many things, peace of mind, nights wehere sleep comes easily, calmness at the sudden sound of a loud bang. There are so many things war robbed our guys of, limbs that are whole and work just fine are among the many. Unfortunately there is an even more awful thief than warfare, it is the uncertainty the holds us back from taking the bold step to say to someone we are interested in and satating our feelings, risking it all. I would much rather hear no, than to spend the rest of my days wondering what if.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
Thank you! I'm so glad I hd the nerve to pop the question to my wife!
-
Me too. I was nervous, but the alternative of living without her was worse.
-
I know exactly how you felt.
Comment from royowen
Such a sad ending to this story, my dad was at Britain's retreat from Dunkirk, 300,000 British troop under heavy fire from German stukas escaped via mostly pleasure and fishing craft sent from England, these brave men lived to fight again. Beautifully written, great job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
Such a sad ending to this story, my dad was at Britain's retreat from Dunkirk, 300,000 British troop under heavy fire from German stukas escaped via mostly pleasure and fishing craft sent from England, these brave men lived to fight again. Beautifully written, great job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
God truly blessed your dad. Thank The Lord for those brave semen who played their part in that valiant time!
-
Bless you
-
Your writings are always blessings.
-
Bless you
-
Thanks for your very meaningful work.
-
Pleasure
Comment from Sallyo
That was unexpected. I quite thought the narrator was a ghost! The story is well constructed, and moves at a good pace. I saw no typos... unless "the time came to me" is meant to be "the time to talk came to me". It does seem a little odd, but not wrong, exactly. I can see this one fitting into an anthology of flash.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
That was unexpected. I quite thought the narrator was a ghost! The story is well constructed, and moves at a good pace. I saw no typos... unless "the time came to me" is meant to be "the time to talk came to me". It does seem a little odd, but not wrong, exactly. I can see this one fitting into an anthology of flash.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
Thank you so much! Your words humble me.
Comment from Begin Again
Oh wowo! First I was feeling bad for the guy because he was distraught over a love that was not to be and then you toss in the missing legs and the wheel chair. How devastating!
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
Oh wowo! First I was feeling bad for the guy because he was distraught over a love that was not to be and then you toss in the missing legs and the wheel chair. How devastating!
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 01-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
Thank you! I could always use hugs.
Comment from EeanBlack
Damn you! Forgive me I'm a veteran and I've talked to many a man who have left something. The visions. The smells. You touch something that has the texture of a really bad experience. I honestly never sat and talked about girls. This is an eye-opener if people will really read it. I love this story. It did hurt to read, but that is not your problem. You elicited the correct response.
|
Damn you! Forgive me I'm a veteran and I've talked to many a man who have left something. The visions. The smells. You touch something that has the texture of a really bad experience. I honestly never sat and talked about girls. This is an eye-opener if people will really read it. I love this story. It did hurt to read, but that is not your problem. You elicited the correct response.
Comment Written 31-May-2024
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
I enjoyed reading this! It paints a picture well of the story you are telling. It did a good job of grabbing my attention and holding onto it. I'd like to liberate some Italian wine!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
|
I enjoyed reading this! It paints a picture well of the story you are telling. It did a good job of grabbing my attention and holding onto it. I'd like to liberate some Italian wine!
Comment Written 31-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
-
I would, but my wife is waiting for me in Heaven and I told her I wouldn't drink.