Summer Journey
An etheree poem2 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
This is a hard contest to write for. That is the problem with contests. They force compliance with rules over writing with substance.
I want to say that your contest entry is better than most. Good luck with that
Why is there a feeling of dread as one draws near?
All of your other lines in the poem reference pleasant positive things. So, I was not expecting the word dread to be in the last line. But maybe it's a good surprise. Like maybe you're on a walk and going further into the woods or big.
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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This is a hard contest to write for. That is the problem with contests. They force compliance with rules over writing with substance.
I want to say that your contest entry is better than most. Good luck with that
Why is there a feeling of dread as one draws near?
All of your other lines in the poem reference pleasant positive things. So, I was not expecting the word dread to be in the last line. But maybe it's a good surprise. Like maybe you're on a walk and going further into the woods or big.
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work
With kind regards
Comment from Sallyo
An interesting one with the warm peaceful body of the poem suddenly chilling into the ending. It raises all kinds of questions which is not easy in such a short piece.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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An interesting one with the warm peaceful body of the poem suddenly chilling into the ending. It raises all kinds of questions which is not easy in such a short piece.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. With kind regards