Playing Around
a 5-7-5 about Spring8 total reviews
Comment from Andrea Kepple
You brought back memories from when I was little and would sit on our front porch watching the breeze dance through the leaves of our neighbors' trees. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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You brought back memories from when I was little and would sit on our front porch watching the breeze dance through the leaves of our neighbors' trees. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I am delighted you enjoyed my poem and that it brought backs favorite memories. Rod
Comment from Erika Whittle
This is so cute! I've never really thought of the wind as being mischievous but when I think about all the things the wind tosses around, you're right! Great job
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This is so cute! I've never really thought of the wind as being mischievous but when I think about all the things the wind tosses around, you're right! Great job
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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The wind can be mischievous one minute and brutal the next (as it is today around here). I truly appreciate your praise of my poem. Rod
Comment from nancyjam
This is a sweet 5-7-5 about Spring. i like how the breeze teases the leaves. Good use of assonance. The sweetness of a playful kitten adds to the charm of your poem. A perfect spring day!
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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This is a sweet 5-7-5 about Spring. i like how the breeze teases the leaves. Good use of assonance. The sweetness of a playful kitten adds to the charm of your poem. A perfect spring day!
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I am delighted by your "sweet" praise of my short poem, Nancy. Thank you.,
Comment from Mintybee
I gave this a four because the prompt was 5-7-5 and you have 5-8-5. That's easily fixed, though. You could say verdant instead of emerald and achieve the same effect. The poem is otherwise good. The comparison of a cat toying with leaves to a breeze toying with leaves is cute.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I gave this a four because the prompt was 5-7-5 and you have 5-8-5. That's easily fixed, though. You could say verdant instead of emerald and achieve the same effect. The poem is otherwise good. The comparison of a cat toying with leaves to a breeze toying with leaves is cute.
Mintybee
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I appreciate your praising my short poem, Mintybee. As for EMERALD, my dictionary says it can be pronounced with three syllables OR two (EM-RULD). I chose the latter.
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Okay. I did check both Miriam-Webster and the Oxford English Dictionary before commenting in case I was wrong, and neither had a a two syllable option. Syllable count is so important in haiku I thought I should bring it up. Sorry I seem to have offended you.
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Mintybee, you did not offend me and I appreciate your concern. I have a dictionary app on my iPad which I consulted. Also, I am from the West where we tend to slur syllables together. I have never pronounced EMERALD with 3 syllables.
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I'm glad you were not offended. I'm from Southern Ontario. Geography has a surprising effect on linguistics, doesn't it? When some dictionaries take that into account and others don't, highly structured forms like haiku become a bit more difficult. Anyways, I liked your poem. Happy writing.
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I?ve enjoyed the conversation. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. I like how you personified the breeze like a playful kitten teasing the leaves as they move. the artwork adds to the presentation. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. I like how you personified the breeze like a playful kitten teasing the leaves as they move. the artwork adds to the presentation. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I?m delighted you like my personification of the breeze, Marilyn. Many thanks for sharing and praising my poem.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoy reading your poem. I like the words: a spring breeze teases words. I love the picture of the kitten, it is adorable. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I enjoy reading your poem. I like the words: a spring breeze teases words. I love the picture of the kitten, it is adorable. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Brenda, I am delighted you enjoyed my words and selected artwork. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet natured post for spring as the elm is a rare sight indeed these days and I enjoyed your humorous post for the contest and wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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A sweet natured post for spring as the elm is a rare sight indeed these days and I enjoyed your humorous post for the contest and wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I am delighted you enjoyed my spring poem, Dolly. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from zanya
Yes - Spring is definitely in the air in this 5/7/5 for the contest -with a lovely simile reminding the reader of the more gentle breezes of the season
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Yes - Spring is definitely in the air in this 5/7/5 for the contest -with a lovely simile reminding the reader of the more gentle breezes of the season
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you so much, zanya, for your kind praise of my short poem.