The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
We really see Esther grow as a character. She starts out a sort of sad, disgruntled soul who makes friends with the unfriendly Madeline. As I said before, Madeline is starting to become more 3 dimensional, and now so is her new friend.
We see William is still alive, sort of, and being helped by Sebastian. How did he become Celestial?
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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We really see Esther grow as a character. She starts out a sort of sad, disgruntled soul who makes friends with the unfriendly Madeline. As I said before, Madeline is starting to become more 3 dimensional, and now so is her new friend.
We see William is still alive, sort of, and being helped by Sebastian. How did he become Celestial?
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I never discussed it in the story. I guess he was so good on earth, he got to enter the pearly gates with out having to prove himself. Then the council deemed him to be the person to be sent to help guide his friends. He agreed immediately and off he went.
Smiles, Carol
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Okay, well it?s a good element. I thought I?d probably missed it.
Great story!l
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
It keeps on getting better with each chapter. I especially enjoyed this, Esther, that you recently introduced us to readers. I find your story unique and enjoyable.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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It keeps on getting better with each chapter. I especially enjoyed this, Esther, that you recently introduced us to readers. I find your story unique and enjoyable.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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It's different for sure. My mind wonders in different places every time I start to write. Glad you are still enjoying it.
Thanks as always....Smiles, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful parallel between the life of both women and a nice way to show that no matter what there is still place for redemption. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Beautiful parallel between the life of both women and a nice way to show that no matter what there is still place for redemption. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Oh, Iza, Thank you so much for jumping back into the story. It's been a strange one to write but fun as well. I appreciate your thoughts and review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
So Esther can be the one who makes everything right, if she can bring William out of his incoherent state. You might add William to your cast of characters.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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So Esther can be the one who makes everything right, if she can bring William out of his incoherent state. You might add William to your cast of characters.
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I think it might take more than Esther, but I believe she will be the one to find the clues from William. It will take more than one person to decipher them and trace them down. Thanks for catching that...I'd left him out at first because I didn't want the reader to realize we had a grandfather and a grandson with the same name. Then of course, my brain forgot to put him in. Good catch, my friend.
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Esther sounds as though she really needs full release. The interactions between the ghostly figures all reveal a little more of the complex puzzle you have created. Hopefully Sandra will return, understand and sort out the complexities of the past, and bring relief and healing to all who genuinely seek it.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Esther sounds as though she really needs full release. The interactions between the ghostly figures all reveal a little more of the complex puzzle you have created. Hopefully Sandra will return, understand and sort out the complexities of the past, and bring relief and healing to all who genuinely seek it.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Good morning, Wendy!
I think you might enjoy the next chapter... and you will learn what Sandra's thoughts are on what is unfolding. Thanks for the review and Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I hoping all these trapped sould looking for salvation will find it. I assume Sarah will be the one to find ther treasure and help with their leaving thre house for paradise. You are doing a great job witht the story.
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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I hoping all these trapped sould looking for salvation will find it. I assume Sarah will be the one to find ther treasure and help with their leaving thre house for paradise. You are doing a great job witht the story.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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I think you meant Sandra...but regardless...I believe the next chapter might clarify Sandra's intentions. Hope you enjoy it. Thank you for the awesome thoughts and for the stars. I greatly appreciate them. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
I wanna see the notebook and the incoherent ramblings!! Sounds like a fine puzzle. So, though William disintegrated under Victoria's attack, he's still around in some form. Very interesting!
A suggestion for a pretty insignificant reword:
Men were quick to find me, especially one particular one.
(...especially one in particular.)
Great chapter!
Julie
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I wanna see the notebook and the incoherent ramblings!! Sounds like a fine puzzle. So, though William disintegrated under Victoria's attack, he's still around in some form. Very interesting!
A suggestion for a pretty insignificant reword:
Men were quick to find me, especially one particular one.
(...especially one in particular.)
Great chapter!
Julie
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Good catch! That sounds better.... Trying to get this next chapter done for tomorrow but my eyes are getting blurry. Probably have to finish it in the morning. With William being a ghost (and the center of the ghost world) I didn't think he could get killed again if he was already dead, so he vaporized and the whispering ghosts in the walls rescued him and brought him to Sebastian. Sounds rational to me...but then I doubt I am ever rational. LOL I'm working on those clues.... they've got be a little stumped on how we follow one after another to find the treasure....I suppose something will come to me.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is interesting. The ghost story seems to be taking on a slight turn with a celestial being sent from above to help redeem lost souls. It seems the ghosts of the mansion and their backstory are far more important than the heir. I'm cheering for Esther. She's suffered great pain.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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This is interesting. The ghost story seems to be taking on a slight turn with a celestial being sent from above to help redeem lost souls. It seems the ghosts of the mansion and their backstory are far more important than the heir. I'm cheering for Esther. She's suffered great pain.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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In one or two more chapters, Sandra will find herself embroiled in the darkness. But I must admit, the story breathes its own life and has taken me in a way I had never imagined. I can guarantee in the beginning none of this was in my notes....That's how I write though. Letting things develop as I go. Lorrie should be with us soon too.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'll have a six for tomorrow's chapter!!!! LOL. This is amazing! I do hope Esther is the one to free them all and free herself from all the pain she has suffered. Perhaps she will see William and her son again. That would be so nice. This story gets better with every chapter, my friend. Well done again! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I'll have a six for tomorrow's chapter!!!! LOL. This is amazing! I do hope Esther is the one to free them all and free herself from all the pain she has suffered. Perhaps she will see William and her son again. That would be so nice. This story gets better with every chapter, my friend. Well done again! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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So sweet of you....I hoped people wouldn't be bored that the story has taken a bit of a twist and slowed down for a few chapters. Not to fear, more is yet to come. I can't write a story with all evil and gore. I've got to touch a few hearts here and there. Even if it is only through my characters.
I'm about two thirds of the way through the next chapter. Esther decides whether she will meet William. That's a tough one for her.
And I think it's time to bring Sandra back into the game. People are worried that she was the star (the Unwilling Heir) but what can I say...the story changed a bit. I'm trying to please the whole crew.
Thanks so much for reading these chapters and of course always encouraging me.
Smiles, hugs, and lots of love, Carol
PS. Hope your face is feeling better.
Comment from Esther Brown
Oh boy. I only wondered about William's one "massive lock of hair"? Other than that tiny interruption to my train of thought I was with you all the way. I am cheering for Esther to take a chance...what has she got to lose? Esther
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Oh boy. I only wondered about William's one "massive lock of hair"? Other than that tiny interruption to my train of thought I was with you all the way. I am cheering for Esther to take a chance...what has she got to lose? Esther
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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My brain was thinking of a giant curl on top of his head, but I guess it didn't come out exactly like that. LOL I'll change it to locks of hair (curly head). Thanks so much and keep enjoying.
Smiles, Carol