Chopper On The Warpath
Jealousy Is A Curse3 total reviews
Comment from EeanBlack
I like this story. It reads well and is very well written. I hope to put together a piece like this someday. I'm still learning. Just have a few months under my belt. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I like this story. It reads well and is very well written. I hope to put together a piece like this someday. I'm still learning. Just have a few months under my belt. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thank you, for your wonderful review. We are all still learning! This connection with Fan Story is my first serious writing go-to. Keep writing, keep believing; your gift, like all gifts, is precious. Keep going
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is quite a lengthy write. I note it says minimum 1000 in the brief so it would be a good idea to note the word count underneath your story. I like the scene you paint in the classroom and the evil Miss Hopper whose tactics of detection were not the best. I also enjoyed your confession when you addressed the reader as the errant Debbie Small. The explanation of all the characters and the part they played also gave the piece a well-rounded conclusion with the dreaded green-eye jealousy at the heart of all this. From the depths indeed! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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This is quite a lengthy write. I note it says minimum 1000 in the brief so it would be a good idea to note the word count underneath your story. I like the scene you paint in the classroom and the evil Miss Hopper whose tactics of detection were not the best. I also enjoyed your confession when you addressed the reader as the errant Debbie Small. The explanation of all the characters and the part they played also gave the piece a well-rounded conclusion with the dreaded green-eye jealousy at the heart of all this. From the depths indeed! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Yes, I understand your point, Debbie. iIt was a minimum word count of 1000. I will take the risk
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was well written. A strong entry to the contest. The tension between Miss Hopper's authoritarian demeanor and the students' resilience and determination to uncover the truth creates a captivating story that kept me engaged until the very end. Great job - keep up the terrific storytelling!
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I thought this was well written. A strong entry to the contest. The tension between Miss Hopper's authoritarian demeanor and the students' resilience and determination to uncover the truth creates a captivating story that kept me engaged until the very end. Great job - keep up the terrific storytelling!
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thank you, Michael. Your reviews never fail to encourage me. They are much appreciated.