Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

The rules are the same as free verse. You can use any amount of syllables and lines. Doesn't rhyme. It's written in lowercase and no punctuation. -- sounds like my kind of poem LOL!!

loved these lines!
"the night
embraced by the summer breeze
on my cradling boat
lulled by waves"

feels like a lullaby...

a great free verse with bittersweet yet calming imagery
smooth flow throughout the lines
love the colours and pics, too

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 15-May-2024

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reply by the author on 15-May-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.

Gypsy

Comment from RJ Heritage

Excellent

This to me is about lost love abd having a broken heart. I like the analogies you used and the shades that underline the different emotions being experience.
Thanks for sharing
RJ

 Comment Written 15-May-2024

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reply by the author on 15-May-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.

Gypsy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Thanks for introducing us to the Ryokan poetic form. And you really showed us the feelings of abandonment and grief in this poem. I liked : "embraced by the summer breeze on my cradling boat."

 Comment Written 15-May-2024

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reply by the author on 15-May-2024

Thank you very much, big sister.

Love,

Gypsy

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem with lovely images and a smooth flow.The moon and the sea, the summer breeze etc. all produce a sense of loneliness
and melancholy in the reader. Well done.
Nancy

 Comment Written 14-May-2024

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reply by the author on 14-May-2024

Thank you very much, Nancy

Gypsy