The Last Christmas
A Final Journal Entry3 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good contest entry you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very good contest entry you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 04-May-2024
Comment from RodG
You pack a lot of narrative into 100 words. I really like how you set the scene with a to-do list. You also characterize him succinctly by telling us he's lazy and crossing out his backstory which he's trying hard to forget by drinking. The last line is terrific because it's bitter irony and he knows it.
This shortie is really well done! Rod
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You pack a lot of narrative into 100 words. I really like how you set the scene with a to-do list. You also characterize him succinctly by telling us he's lazy and crossing out his backstory which he's trying hard to forget by drinking. The last line is terrific because it's bitter irony and he knows it.
This shortie is really well done! Rod
Comment Written 04-May-2024
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this piece. The 'to-do' list at the beginning is a good choice and the erasing of sentences gives a more authentic feel to the piece.
Best of luck to you
GMG
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Hi there,
I liked this piece. The 'to-do' list at the beginning is a good choice and the erasing of sentences gives a more authentic feel to the piece.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 04-May-2024