2024 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Cherry Blossoms Bloom"*
13 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
The beauty and vitality of the natural world stand in stark contrast to a personal sorrow, and human beings seem to do everything possible to make someone unhappy.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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The beauty and vitality of the natural world stand in stark contrast to a personal sorrow, and human beings seem to do everything possible to make someone unhappy.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Mark
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
The cherry blossoms blooming on the Tidal Basin in Washington DC is one of my favorite places to be. They're gorgeous as is the scent. Thank you for sharing this poem and reminding me of this great memory.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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The cherry blossoms blooming on the Tidal Basin in Washington DC is one of my favorite places to be. They're gorgeous as is the scent. Thank you for sharing this poem and reminding me of this great memory.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Barbara :)
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice images and presentation, Gypsy.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written tanka with a good topic.
-Very good nature imagery in the opening lines.
-A very good pivot line that changes the previous mood.
-The concluding lines show that when we are
impacted by the noise from "city sounds," it is
hard to appreciate the special things in life.
-Very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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-Very nice images and presentation, Gypsy.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written tanka with a good topic.
-Very good nature imagery in the opening lines.
-A very good pivot line that changes the previous mood.
-The concluding lines show that when we are
impacted by the noise from "city sounds," it is
hard to appreciate the special things in life.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Pam
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You are welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from royowen
This is a classically written tanka, with all the charm and the thrust of this poetic form. The pivot line is perfectly placed to seperate and join the two contrasts, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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This is a classically written tanka, with all the charm and the thrust of this poetic form. The pivot line is perfectly placed to seperate and join the two contrasts, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy.
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A pleasure
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy :)
I enjoyed reading your tanka. I particularly admire the pivot on the third line, which works perfectly with both halves of the poem. Two clear, separate thoughts/pictures/moments beautifully linked. Your presentation is also lovely.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hello Gypsy :)
I enjoyed reading your tanka. I particularly admire the pivot on the third line, which works perfectly with both halves of the poem. Two clear, separate thoughts/pictures/moments beautifully linked. Your presentation is also lovely.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Debra,
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Comment from RJ Heritage
Beautiful words that are complimented by the colors and style of the poem.
Thanks for sharing these lovely verses.
Have a great night
God bless and keep you well.
RJ
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Beautiful words that are complimented by the colors and style of the poem.
Thanks for sharing these lovely verses.
Have a great night
God bless and keep you well.
RJ
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
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Comment from kahpot
I really like the way this goes from emotion to emotion, as we enjoy the sounds of love and then to missing our loved one, so very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I really like the way this goes from emotion to emotion, as we enjoy the sounds of love and then to missing our loved one, so very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Kym
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Comment from lyenochka
This is a fabulous tanka poem! It should be in a contest! There are clearly two halves to the poem broken up with the city sounds in the middle. We drift from the spring sounds in nature to a busy city, which is like a cluttered mind in which the echoes of the loved one's "laughter struggle to stay afloat." Great mix of emotions and mix of something audible with something physical.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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This is a fabulous tanka poem! It should be in a contest! There are clearly two halves to the poem broken up with the city sounds in the middle. We drift from the spring sounds in nature to a busy city, which is like a cluttered mind in which the echoes of the loved one's "laughter struggle to stay afloat." Great mix of emotions and mix of something audible with something physical.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Big Sister. I appreciate the excellent review and kind feedback. I am happy you like my tanka.
Love,
MariVal
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sometimes it does feel like it's a struggle to stay afloat. Especially if your heart is broken or empty and it seems like every where you look there is happiness and joy. And you just want to end the nunb feeling. Beautiful poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Sometimes it does feel like it's a struggle to stay afloat. Especially if your heart is broken or empty and it seems like every where you look there is happiness and joy. And you just want to end the nunb feeling. Beautiful poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much , Gretchen (*÷*)
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
I loved how you have used the metaphor so elegantly as your third line intention is created in the all encompassing rubble hiding the beauty of fading echoes.
As always, I appreciate the effort you go to in presenting your craft, composing your craft and delivering your excellence within your love of words and emotions.
Beautiful!
With our thoughts we create...
buffer zones.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Hi MariVal,
I loved how you have used the metaphor so elegantly as your third line intention is created in the all encompassing rubble hiding the beauty of fading echoes.
As always, I appreciate the effort you go to in presenting your craft, composing your craft and delivering your excellence within your love of words and emotions.
Beautiful!
With our thoughts we create...
buffer zones.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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James! I'm happy you stopped by and you like my Tanka Poem. (*÷*)
Con cariņo
Marival
"The desire to reach for the stars is ambitious. The desire to reach hearts is wise."
-- Maya Angelou.