God, loving Heavenly Father
God has created everything, and all life.2 total reviews
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is really good, I will give you a six. As a Christian myself, I was thinking the other day, how deep is my faith? Sometimes it is really shaken, but I was thinking about how I know that I lean on Him especially when things get tough. This is great.
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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This is really good, I will give you a six. As a Christian myself, I was thinking the other day, how deep is my faith? Sometimes it is really shaken, but I was thinking about how I know that I lean on Him especially when things get tough. This is great.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thanks so much for this very encouraging review toward my writing. It helps me know more about my writing to see how it affects the reader, like you.
Comment from Mark Jackson
Okay, I like it. It is not the sort of thing I would usually read but that is fine. I actually like the fact that you have written in free verse. Not everything has to look like a poem to be a poem. I would ask you a couple of questions because it might be a style choice, Firstly it is usually not correct to begin a sentence with And. Secondly it is not usual to put a comma before and when there are only two items. It is a poem so these rules do not have to apply I guess. Thanks for sharing. Five stars because any changes are optional.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Okay, I like it. It is not the sort of thing I would usually read but that is fine. I actually like the fact that you have written in free verse. Not everything has to look like a poem to be a poem. I would ask you a couple of questions because it might be a style choice, Firstly it is usually not correct to begin a sentence with And. Secondly it is not usual to put a comma before and when there are only two items. It is a poem so these rules do not have to apply I guess. Thanks for sharing. Five stars because any changes are optional.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much for your helpful review. I did make some changes. And seems to come naturally when starting a new thought that is still referring to the previous one. I really like that you recognized it as free verse as it is that. I'll work more with the punctuation.