The Unwilling Heir
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16 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Well, that came out of left field, I will eventually catch up. With both stories. I am pooped, I did organizing today and did some account switching. I have lists a yard long of tasks to do when you move. Yikes!
Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Well, that came out of left field, I will eventually catch up. With both stories. I am pooped, I did organizing today and did some account switching. I have lists a yard long of tasks to do when you move. Yikes!
Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I know you are busy and have your hands full, but thanks for stopping by and catching a chapter of my story. I appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
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I owe you two more. Gotta go. Karen
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:-)
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. The blue font makes more sense to me now. You are moving the story along nicely, and a little creepily. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. The blue font makes more sense to me now. You are moving the story along nicely, and a little creepily. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Hello there! Sorry I haven't got back to you but I am enjoying a short vacation at the ocean with my great granddaughters. Will be back home by Sunday and back into the writing mode I hope.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You certainly know how to build suspense and keep the reader coming back for more. I like this story even more than the previous ones you wrote. Nice writing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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You certainly know how to build suspense and keep the reader coming back for more. I like this story even more than the previous ones you wrote. Nice writing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Oh my! Now that just blew me away...Thank you. What especially is pulling you into this story?
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
The major element that contributes to the enjoyment of this story is your attention to detail. You develop each character through dialogue and actions and thoroughly describe each scene so we can visualize each movement to see what you saw in your mind's eye. I am engrossed. I love what you're doing with Lorrie.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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The major element that contributes to the enjoyment of this story is your attention to detail. You develop each character through dialogue and actions and thoroughly describe each scene so we can visualize each movement to see what you saw in your mind's eye. I am engrossed. I love what you're doing with Lorrie.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Lorraine....let me know if you need her to be a little spicier.lol... I am trying to work on another chapter but it's not working out to well at the moment. Granddaughters come first! Thank you for your kind comments and thoughts. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
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Hi Carol,
I'm pleased with Lorrie, and all your characters, exactly as you have them portrayed.
I hope you have a happy Easter.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh yes! There is definitely a story here, and I also want to know what is going on. I'm still convinced all three in the cemetery, but how can Lorrie and James see them, and Sandra, for that matter!! I have one more chapter to read, are you going to leave me hanging!!?? I'm really enjoying this story, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Oh yes! There is definitely a story here, and I also want to know what is going on. I'm still convinced all three in the cemetery, but how can Lorrie and James see them, and Sandra, for that matter!! I have one more chapter to read, are you going to leave me hanging!!?? I'm really enjoying this story, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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It's taking awhile for me to reveal the basics but I hope it still holds the readers attention. I'm not good with ghosts I have definitely learned, but I am giving it a shot. Thanks so much for following and for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
You've certainly redeemed the story Caro, it's certainly more interesting and planned, than it appeared at the beginning episode, it's a good thing you kept going, now you've set up a great plot, and a great episode, well done, Happy Easter, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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You've certainly redeemed the story Caro, it's certainly more interesting and planned, than it appeared at the beginning episode, it's a good thing you kept going, now you've set up a great plot, and a great episode, well done, Happy Easter, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thanks Roy. Guess I got to tense about jumping into something that was out of my league.... I still don't have it down but it's coming along smoother. Thanks for sticking with me.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is good as she doesn't realize James and Lorrie are also dead. But the reader could be wondering since the Judge was part of the group she talked to. After awhile, you will have your readers wondering if there is anyone alive in the house besides the widow.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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This is good as she doesn't realize James and Lorrie are also dead. But the reader could be wondering since the Judge was part of the group she talked to. After awhile, you will have your readers wondering if there is anyone alive in the house besides the widow.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Hmmmm.... you might be on to something there! LOL It will all unfold here shortly...or at least I hope. Thanks so much!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
You are on a roll! My spider sense wants me to believe Lorrie is a "friendly ghost)--but knowing how well you weave a tale I won't decide just yet!
Sandra comes off just eager enough to rush headlong into the mystery... and that presents some interesting scenarios!
You've more than found your footing!
I'm craving your next chapter AND a cannoli!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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You are on a roll! My spider sense wants me to believe Lorrie is a "friendly ghost)--but knowing how well you weave a tale I won't decide just yet!
Sandra comes off just eager enough to rush headlong into the mystery... and that presents some interesting scenarios!
You've more than found your footing!
I'm craving your next chapter AND a cannoli!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Hello there, my sweet Karenina...
Wishing I could bring you a cannoli....but I am currently freezing in NC...they had 80 degrees till I got here...It's currently 36....but they are calling for high 70s for the next four days. That I will take...as if I had a choice. LOL Glad you enjoyed the chapter and are willing to stick with me. It's been a rough ride... The PM are different that's for sure.
Smiles, Carol
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Thirty-six degrees? What? Did you pack up the cold and bring it with you?
Although 70's sounds great!
Enjoy!
Comment from Esther Brown
I am way too enthusiastic about this story. You keep ramping up the adrenaline. I am playing hooky from work to read them now, good thing I can work from my kitchen table. Smile. Esther
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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I am way too enthusiastic about this story. You keep ramping up the adrenaline. I am playing hooky from work to read them now, good thing I can work from my kitchen table. Smile. Esther
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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I am thrilled you liked this chapter better than the other two. Appreciate your kind review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wait a new book? What happened to the last one? And do I sense mystery and romance some kind of after dark love story? Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Wait a new book? What happened to the last one? And do I sense mystery and romance some kind of after dark love story? Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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I finished the last one ...about 49000 words in 15 days. Not bad! Might have a bit of everything in this one. Thanks Iza.
Smiles, Carol