Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I guess it takes an observant eye to see past the "barren fields" and walk through the "rivers of life" and notice how there is so much life in what at first appears as "barren."

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024

Thank you very much, big sister.

Love

Marival

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

there's an english tanka??? cool.
excellent imagery in this
i can totally see the barren fields
flourishing with new crops
while skipping upon the stones of life...
nice!!
each line can stand alone as the connect with the others with a smooth flow -
thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024

Thank you very much, Shelley. Have a wonderful day.

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Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Beautiful poem. It was like waking through a Japanese garden. I could see koi and ponds and stone pagodas. It made me think of a beautiful garden in Richmond. Full of Japanese culture. I always felt at peace there. Gretchen

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024

Thank you very much, Gretchen. Have a wonderful day.

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Comment from Baltimore Born

Excellent

This is a well-crafted poem. Your poem reads and flows well. Your poem paints a good mental image. Each line connected well with the next. Your last line sums the poem up well. Nice job.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024

Thank you very much, Baltimore. Have a wonderful day.

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reply by Baltimore Born on 21-Feb-2024

You're welcome. Same to you too.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Yes, were e'er we travel we must be on the lookout lest we trip ourselves up. These items you've mentioned, by the power of observation, are most articulate, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024

Thank you very much, Roy. Have a wonderful day.

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