Howling winds
100 word fiction18 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Seems she did not want Malcolm or his "vintage loins" regardless if her well-to-do father arranged the union or not.
The "winter winds howl" indicated she haunted the manor and reflected her aching loneliness for Charles.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Seems she did not want Malcolm or his "vintage loins" regardless if her well-to-do father arranged the union or not.
The "winter winds howl" indicated she haunted the manor and reflected her aching loneliness for Charles.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from lyenochka
You met all the requirements of "Main Character, Setting, Conflict, Resolution" in just these 100 words! Lady Isabel was still grieving and was definitely not going to marry Sir Malcolm just because her father wanted her to do so. Congratulations on your third place finish!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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You met all the requirements of "Main Character, Setting, Conflict, Resolution" in just these 100 words! Lady Isabel was still grieving and was definitely not going to marry Sir Malcolm just because her father wanted her to do so. Congratulations on your third place finish!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from XinaD
What a situation! I doubt I'd have just gone along with it either, come what may.
100 words is a terribly small amount. You packed a lot of story into so few words. You didn't cut corners with the imagery or descriptors to save count. Impressively done!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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What a situation! I doubt I'd have just gone along with it either, come what may.
100 words is a terribly small amount. You packed a lot of story into so few words. You didn't cut corners with the imagery or descriptors to save count. Impressively done!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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That's a great review - delighted with it. zanya
Comment from Navada
Well, she was definitely determined not to be married off like the goods and chattels that women were regarded as throughout history. While this is very sad, she departed on her own terms. Good for her! :)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Well, she was definitely determined not to be married off like the goods and chattels that women were regarded as throughout history. While this is very sad, she departed on her own terms. Good for her! :)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from tfawcus
A non-compliant daughter! The downfall of many a noble line. Probably a wise decision on her part. One will ever know what vile diseases Sir Malcolm might have picked up while sowing those wild oats.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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A non-compliant daughter! The downfall of many a noble line. Probably a wise decision on her part. One will ever know what vile diseases Sir Malcolm might have picked up while sowing those wild oats.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Great review even with 'wild oats'! zanya
Comment from Jeano
This is a very nice piece of fiction, and tells a complete story. I think you might have a winning entry with this one. My fav so far. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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This is a very nice piece of fiction, and tells a complete story. I think you might have a winning entry with this one. My fav so far. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Great review -thanks for the accolade. zanya
Comment from Dawn Munro
Not one for an arranged marriage, our Lady Isobel! You've left me wondering what became of her.
I love the language you have used -- one typo -- 'today, Isabel = the "t" needs to be a capital letter.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Not one for an arranged marriage, our Lady Isobel! You've left me wondering what became of her.
I love the language you have used -- one typo -- 'today, Isabel = the "t" needs to be a capital letter.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Great review zanya
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ah ha! Lovely! That was a mad dash and I would like to have read more! But you managed to convey a very readable, lighthearted story in 100 words which is pretty impressive while keeping a smile on my face. Love the dialogue which is excellently spoken of the period. I could almost feel that wind howling! A great entry! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Ah ha! Lovely! That was a mad dash and I would like to have read more! But you managed to convey a very readable, lighthearted story in 100 words which is pretty impressive while keeping a smile on my face. Love the dialogue which is excellently spoken of the period. I could almost feel that wind howling! A great entry! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Superb review ! zanya
Comment from mermaids
This is so good. I love how the lady at the end is never seen again. She did not want to remarry. I applaud her. Excellent writing that is smooth, good character development and your tale takes the reader to another place. You did well creating a short tale that is clear and speaks volumes.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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This is so good. I love how the lady at the end is never seen again. She did not want to remarry. I applaud her. Excellent writing that is smooth, good character development and your tale takes the reader to another place. You did well creating a short tale that is clear and speaks volumes.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Superb review zanya
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an interesting short story with great, realistic dialogue. You were able to tell an entire creative story in one hundred words.
I would suggest the use of quotation marks at the beginning and end of dialogue. Also, put any end-of-sentence punctuation BEFORE quotation marks.
Example: 'today, Isabel,divest yourself of your widow's weeds. Meet Sir Malcom, an eligible suitor, whose wild oats have been sown'.
"Today, Isabel, divest yourself of your widow's weeds. Meet Sir Malcom, an eligible suitor, whose wild oats have been sown."
'Papa, My heart still grieves, for my beloved Sir Charles.'
"Papa, my heart still grieves, for my beloved Sir Charles."
'Fiddlesticks,' papa replied,'Offspring from Sir Malcom's vintage loins will soon dispel your grief and ensure the future of Ayrfield Manor.'
"Fiddlesticks," papa replied. "Offspring from Sir Malcom's vintage loins will soon dispel your grief and ensure the future of Ayrfield Manor."
I wish you much success in the contest and in your writing journey.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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This is an interesting short story with great, realistic dialogue. You were able to tell an entire creative story in one hundred words.
I would suggest the use of quotation marks at the beginning and end of dialogue. Also, put any end-of-sentence punctuation BEFORE quotation marks.
Example: 'today, Isabel,divest yourself of your widow's weeds. Meet Sir Malcom, an eligible suitor, whose wild oats have been sown'.
"Today, Isabel, divest yourself of your widow's weeds. Meet Sir Malcom, an eligible suitor, whose wild oats have been sown."
'Papa, My heart still grieves, for my beloved Sir Charles.'
"Papa, my heart still grieves, for my beloved Sir Charles."
'Fiddlesticks,' papa replied,'Offspring from Sir Malcom's vintage loins will soon dispel your grief and ensure the future of Ayrfield Manor.'
"Fiddlesticks," papa replied. "Offspring from Sir Malcom's vintage loins will soon dispel your grief and ensure the future of Ayrfield Manor."
I wish you much success in the contest and in your writing journey.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Great review & thanks for spotting those spags! zanya