Ten Minute Scripts For Two Actors
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Anomaly"A collection of short scripts
10 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Navada,
This is a tale of horror. And eye-opener.
The first time my "eyes were opened" was when I came home from school one day (Grade 7) to find out that President John F. Kennedy had been assassinated.
Your script touches on disease and mutation, a police state, extermination.
There are so many things we are facing these days, and they all bring alarm to us... Covid-19 (you beat it by 4 months when you wrote this), hot temperatures around the world, pollution, polar ice melting, forest fires, war in Ukraine and the Middle East, refugees, homeless people, soup kitchens, excessive taxes, etc.
Humans have been fighting viruses since forever. Ebola killed 90% of people infected. And there are many other viruses we deal with... Marburg, Ebola, Rabies, HIV, Smallpox, Hantavirus, Influenxa, Dengue, Rotavirus, SARS-CoV, SARS-CoV-2, MERS-CoV, etc.
Temperatures are getting too hot. Last year, especially in British Columbia, forest fires were out of control for much of the summer. Back in 1913, on July 10th, the hottest temperature on Earth was 56.7C (134.1F) at Furnace Creek Ranch in Death Valley, USA.
Will the equator eventually become uninhabitable, with huge migrations of people?
Scientists predict that if we keep going with current greenhouse gas emissions, climate change will cause the extinction of 1/3 of our plants and animals by 2050. That's only 26 years away!!! And they go further, predicting 70% extinction by 2100. I'll be long gone by then, but what about my grandkids and great grandkids? Can you imagine the immense hardships people will face in another hundred years?
These are the thoughts brought to mind when I read your script this morning. Scary!
The one suggestion I'd offer for you... the conversation would be better if "MAN" and "WOMAN" were closer to their lines. I had to keep scrolling back to see who was talking.
An alarming post, but perhaps necessary to help get people on board with saving our planet.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Hi Navada,
This is a tale of horror. And eye-opener.
The first time my "eyes were opened" was when I came home from school one day (Grade 7) to find out that President John F. Kennedy had been assassinated.
Your script touches on disease and mutation, a police state, extermination.
There are so many things we are facing these days, and they all bring alarm to us... Covid-19 (you beat it by 4 months when you wrote this), hot temperatures around the world, pollution, polar ice melting, forest fires, war in Ukraine and the Middle East, refugees, homeless people, soup kitchens, excessive taxes, etc.
Humans have been fighting viruses since forever. Ebola killed 90% of people infected. And there are many other viruses we deal with... Marburg, Ebola, Rabies, HIV, Smallpox, Hantavirus, Influenxa, Dengue, Rotavirus, SARS-CoV, SARS-CoV-2, MERS-CoV, etc.
Temperatures are getting too hot. Last year, especially in British Columbia, forest fires were out of control for much of the summer. Back in 1913, on July 10th, the hottest temperature on Earth was 56.7C (134.1F) at Furnace Creek Ranch in Death Valley, USA.
Will the equator eventually become uninhabitable, with huge migrations of people?
Scientists predict that if we keep going with current greenhouse gas emissions, climate change will cause the extinction of 1/3 of our plants and animals by 2050. That's only 26 years away!!! And they go further, predicting 70% extinction by 2100. I'll be long gone by then, but what about my grandkids and great grandkids? Can you imagine the immense hardships people will face in another hundred years?
These are the thoughts brought to mind when I read your script this morning. Scary!
The one suggestion I'd offer for you... the conversation would be better if "MAN" and "WOMAN" were closer to their lines. I had to keep scrolling back to see who was talking.
An alarming post, but perhaps necessary to help get people on board with saving our planet.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 26-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful and detailed review and the generous six stars, Kimbob - they are greatly appreciated. :)
Comment from BethShelby
This is a horror script. I can't imagine you writing it that long ago. I didn't here that much about preppers but maybe I wasn't in tune hecause that was during the time my husband was fighting for his life with cancer. A couple of my children are modern day preppers. I not going to worry about. It may not be wise but I'll among the unprepared. Your script is well written an chilling.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2024
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This is a horror script. I can't imagine you writing it that long ago. I didn't here that much about preppers but maybe I wasn't in tune hecause that was during the time my husband was fighting for his life with cancer. A couple of my children are modern day preppers. I not going to worry about. It may not be wise but I'll among the unprepared. Your script is well written an chilling.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Beth! I won't be prepared either - I just roll with it. :)
Comment from royowen
You could be described as a prophet couldn't you.I can remember the seventies when we thought we were going to run out fossil fuels, there were plans afoot to see how we would cope, without power and job losses, so a beautifully written script, well done, blessings Roy
Pp
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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You could be described as a prophet couldn't you.I can remember the seventies when we thought we were going to run out fossil fuels, there were plans afoot to see how we would cope, without power and job losses, so a beautifully written script, well done, blessings Roy
Pp
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Roy. It did give me pause, that's for sure! :)
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Well done
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, the advent of Covid, so unforeseen, must have been so startling for you, having just finished this. It was written with ghastly realism, and the understated ending was excellent. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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Yes, the advent of Covid, so unforeseen, must have been so startling for you, having just finished this. It was written with ghastly realism, and the understated ending was excellent. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much! Yes, it definitely gave me pause when covid hit. :) Thanks for the observation about the ending - it took me a while to work out where I wanted it to go. I actually developed this into a one-act play, but it was never performed due to the pandemic. It was never going to be performed in its ten-minute state due to the staging requirements.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Navada,
This is an unpleasant scenario to think about. I don't worry about all the things that the environmentalists worry about, I think we'll descend into anarchy before that happens. There's already a steady march towards disobeying the law by the very people who are supposed to be making law in this country. We have Ellis Island where the immigrant used to come to be processed. Now we've got millions of them coming over the southern border illegally and the president is encouraging it. Law? What law? Thanks for sharing this gal.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Hello Navada,
This is an unpleasant scenario to think about. I don't worry about all the things that the environmentalists worry about, I think we'll descend into anarchy before that happens. There's already a steady march towards disobeying the law by the very people who are supposed to be making law in this country. We have Ellis Island where the immigrant used to come to be processed. Now we've got millions of them coming over the southern border illegally and the president is encouraging it. Law? What law? Thanks for sharing this gal.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Tom! :)
Comment from Jim Wile
Oh, my! How prescient you were, Navada. I can certainly imagine your shock, as you described what happened with Covid so nearly. Although perhaps not quite as devastating as what happens in your story, this part is so close to what actually happened, that it's scary how good your prediction was:
"Maybe hiding here like bloody hermits and living on tinned crap and radio broadcasts is all gonna be for nothing. Maybe we're just screwed like everyone else and there's not a damn thing anyone can do to stop it."
This was a riveting script that was so well done. Did you get to direct this one? - Jim
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Oh, my! How prescient you were, Navada. I can certainly imagine your shock, as you described what happened with Covid so nearly. Although perhaps not quite as devastating as what happens in your story, this part is so close to what actually happened, that it's scary how good your prediction was:
"Maybe hiding here like bloody hermits and living on tinned crap and radio broadcasts is all gonna be for nothing. Maybe we're just screwed like everyone else and there's not a damn thing anyone can do to stop it."
This was a riveting script that was so well done. Did you get to direct this one? - Jim
Comment Written 22-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, Jim! No, this one hasn't been performed. I got to direct online readings of Lexicography and Letters from the Front after the planned performances were cancelled due to Covid and I also got to direct a performance of a monologue I will post later today called Chrysalis. I actually worked this script up into a one-act play, but didn't pursue any further as life and work got in the way. It was always going to be too difficult to stage as a ten-minute play given the specific requirements of the set. :)
Comment from Tyler Withrow
I think the proper word for this post is "prescient". I have known preppers, (past tense, they vanished when they went off the grid), and this is eerily similar to conversations we used to have. It is a credit to your creativity that you beat COVID by four months. Or, if you are a prepper, well done on being prepared.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I think the proper word for this post is "prescient". I have known preppers, (past tense, they vanished when they went off the grid), and this is eerily similar to conversations we used to have. It is a credit to your creativity that you beat COVID by four months. Or, if you are a prepper, well done on being prepared.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! I'm definitely not a prepper and I can't claim to have seen COVID coming, but when it did, this script was firmly in my mind. Freaky. :)
Comment from Wy Jung
Navada, this is the first review offered to me on my return~! What a treat.
It's good to be back home after 5 months away and back on FanStory after almost 2 months! I love this piece. I could easily picture it all. I've not yet written scripts but after being in my first community theater production a few years ago, I became intrigued with how effective the genre can be. Reading them here is inspiring and educational as well.
Anomoly was well written and managed. The only part that seemed a little off to me was the 1st radio message. I hesitate to even mention it because I can't really put my finger on what exactly it was about it that didn't initially stick, and the rest was solid and had me right there on the edge of my third row seat when the stage faded to black.. but I thought in order to not be entirely gushy and riding on the high of my return...I'd attempt to offer up a more balanced review.
Glad to be back and looking forward to getting back in the saddle here. I've missed you guys! haha
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Navada, this is the first review offered to me on my return~! What a treat.
It's good to be back home after 5 months away and back on FanStory after almost 2 months! I love this piece. I could easily picture it all. I've not yet written scripts but after being in my first community theater production a few years ago, I became intrigued with how effective the genre can be. Reading them here is inspiring and educational as well.
Anomoly was well written and managed. The only part that seemed a little off to me was the 1st radio message. I hesitate to even mention it because I can't really put my finger on what exactly it was about it that didn't initially stick, and the rest was solid and had me right there on the edge of my third row seat when the stage faded to black.. but I thought in order to not be entirely gushy and riding on the high of my return...I'd attempt to offer up a more balanced review.
Glad to be back and looking forward to getting back in the saddle here. I've missed you guys! haha
Comment Written 22-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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All good - thank yoi so much! :) Did it feel a little heavily expository perhaps?
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Great word for it. yes, just a little .. maybe like a shortcut to the backstory. Smart way to work it in, though it felt just a tiny bit forced it was super helpful to understand what was happening at that place in time.
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Great word for it. yes, just a little .. maybe like a shortcut to the backstory. Smart way to work it in, though it felt just a tiny bit forced it was super helpful to understand what was happening at that place in time.
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OH! I just saw that it was a part of a larger collection of 10 minute scripts for 2 actors. Clever. To keep the play to 10 minutes that method of backstory reveal is perfect. I didn't realize the criterion you were working within when I wrote about the news story..thinking the backstory could take more time to unravel. For a 10 minute play, it works pretty well.
Cheers!
Comment from Allieas
Christmas Island? What a name!
I don't know much about script-writing, but I enjoyed your story a lot. The pacing was excellent, dialogue felt believable, and your descriptions were helpful and clear. Thanks for sharing!
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Christmas Island? What a name!
I don't know much about script-writing, but I enjoyed your story a lot. The pacing was excellent, dialogue felt believable, and your descriptions were helpful and clear. Thanks for sharing!
Alex
Comment Written 22-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Christmas Island is real. It's an Australian territory and it's where refugees coming to Australia are held in detention and processed. Not a nice place for them.
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It doesn't sound like a nice place for sure!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Shock, indeed!
Well thought out and written.
So, Christmas Island is Australian's Shangri La? Utopian heaven?
I'm assuming 50 degrees is Celsius really hot, about 120F.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Shock, indeed!
Well thought out and written.
So, Christmas Island is Australian's Shangri La? Utopian heaven?
I'm assuming 50 degrees is Celsius really hot, about 120F.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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That's correct. Christmas Island is where our refugee detainees are kept for processing. Not the kind of place you want to be taken to. Thanks, Wayne! :)