Ambush!
In Winter anything can happen.14 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
Love this one and of course, the picture is just wonderful. The whole thing made me chuckle. Good for him, and good for you. Congrats on winning (and sharing) Cute, cute!
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Love this one and of course, the picture is just wonderful. The whole thing made me chuckle. Good for him, and good for you. Congrats on winning (and sharing) Cute, cute!
Katharine
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Katharine, for all the kudos. AMBUSH was fun to write as Rockwell?s art always suggests a story. Glad it made you chuckle. Rod
Comment from Gunner Lil
This short tale brought me back to my younger days. Snowballing the tractor trailers on highway 5.
Great job. An easy read. Enjoyed it.
Thank you and good luck!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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This short tale brought me back to my younger days. Snowballing the tractor trailers on highway 5.
Great job. An easy read. Enjoyed it.
Thank you and good luck!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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So pleased my story brought back memories. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
He was ready for the troublemakers who were about to throw snowballs in his direction. When you get older, you must be prepared. I'm sure whoever it was, was not ready for his arm-throwing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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He was ready for the troublemakers who were about to throw snowballs in his direction. When you get older, you must be prepared. I'm sure whoever it was, was not ready for his arm-throwing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Hal probably had dealings with these rascals before, so he was prepared. Many thanks, Rosemary, for sharing y story.
Comment from Lisasview
Feels like the perfect image for your 80 Word Flash Fiction story dear mystery writer!
I loved every word...
Good luck in the contest,
Lisasview, now living in Spain
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Feels like the perfect image for your 80 Word Flash Fiction story dear mystery writer!
I loved every word...
Good luck in the contest,
Lisasview, now living in Spain
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I am delighted you enjoyed all 80 words of my story, Lisasview. Since you are now in Spain, I?ll say "Gracias!"
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You are so welcome.
Lisa
Comment from Gloria ....
This is so much fun! Hal sounds like a guy who can still get excited about a snowball fight especially with those little rascals making a pile of ammo for themselves.
Perfect story with the setting, characters, conflict and resolution.
Wishing you great luck with the voters. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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This is so much fun! Hal sounds like a guy who can still get excited about a snowball fight especially with those little rascals making a pile of ammo for themselves.
Perfect story with the setting, characters, conflict and resolution.
Wishing you great luck with the voters. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Ah, I achieved my objective. I wanted my story to be FUN to read. Thank you so much for your high praise, Gloria.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. But can you keep those handmade "munitions" inside overcoat pockets? I guess it's not just my hands that don't warm up in pockets. A fun story about an ambush of snowball fights. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Lol. But can you keep those handmade "munitions" inside overcoat pockets? I guess it's not just my hands that don't warm up in pockets. A fun story about an ambush of snowball fights. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Hi, lyenochka. I am delighted you found my story fun to read. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
A delightful read.
Kids will be kids and Hal Rosen is a good sports ..
he could have called out to them and spoilt their fun instead he let them have their moment of triumph.
More likely he still remembers being a demon when he was a child too. ( biggrin)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Ciao!
A delightful read.
Kids will be kids and Hal Rosen is a good sports ..
he could have called out to them and spoilt their fun instead he let them have their moment of triumph.
More likely he still remembers being a demon when he was a child too. ( biggrin)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I am thrilled by your response to my shortie, tempeste. Indeed Hal is a version of myself when I was much younger and enjoyed these battles with neighborhood rascals. I truly appreciate the galaxy of stars you gave me. Many thanks.
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Ciao!
You are welcome! 😐
You have your second vote!
Best of luck! 🍀
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is quite a timely story given the sever weather currently sweeping large portions of the U.S. Your protagonist, Hal Rosen knows his neighborhood and is prepared. Your story is well written, flows smoothly, maintains interest, and has a satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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This is quite a timely story given the sever weather currently sweeping large portions of the U.S. Your protagonist, Hal Rosen knows his neighborhood and is prepared. Your story is well written, flows smoothly, maintains interest, and has a satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, LJbutterfly, for your wonderful praise of my story and those best wishes.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely image to complement this fun flash fiction with its unpredictable ending! I think I can see their knot caps:) I love the way your story hooks the reader into wanting to read more about that snowball fight - clear evidence of a good story-teller! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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A lovely image to complement this fun flash fiction with its unpredictable ending! I think I can see their knot caps:) I love the way your story hooks the reader into wanting to read more about that snowball fight - clear evidence of a good story-teller! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, for such an enthusiastic response to my shortie. This storyteller is very appreciate of your praise.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Great story, a nice plot, and a strong ending. In eighty words, you have laid down a story with positive emotion, surprise elements and one that reminds the reader of their childhood. I enjoyed it.
If I may, I would suggest two things:
a) take out the words 'he expected' and fill two replacement words elsewhere,
b) write 'Hal' instead of 'Rosen' near the end.
Good luck!!!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Great story, a nice plot, and a strong ending. In eighty words, you have laid down a story with positive emotion, surprise elements and one that reminds the reader of their childhood. I enjoyed it.
If I may, I would suggest two things:
a) take out the words 'he expected' and fill two replacement words elsewhere,
b) write 'Hal' instead of 'Rosen' near the end.
Good luck!!!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Mario, for your high praise of my story and your suggestions.