Lair Of The Seductress
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Maritol Drool"Book Four Wolf Bend Series
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Still good. But now, I want to read the other stuff. There are no real points. That is sucky. You are a tempter, sir. This is written well. I like stuff with humor. And I am old enough to like the guys putting their weenie where it doesn't belong and getting punished. Severely. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Still good. But now, I want to read the other stuff. There are no real points. That is sucky. You are a tempter, sir. This is written well. I like stuff with humor. And I am old enough to like the guys putting their weenie where it doesn't belong and getting punished. Severely. :-) Karen
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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He did get seriously punished!
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Yes he did! Take that to heart.
Let this serve as a home truth.
yada yada yada. :-) Karen
Comment from Ulla
Well, this is the first I've read of any of them and I found it quite easy to following along. He and his wife had quite the party.. I'm surprised that only two cups of coffee could bring him back to life. It would have taken me a week or so. Lol.
Now on to the real story. Can't wait. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Well, this is the first I've read of any of them and I found it quite easy to following along. He and his wife had quite the party.. I'm surprised that only two cups of coffee could bring him back to life. It would have taken me a week or so. Lol.
Now on to the real story. Can't wait. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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In the first chapter, "Knockin", a lady named Lilith did a bad thing to a truck driver. Just a heads up, because that is what Greg got woke up for. Thanks for the review!
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I appreciate it, thanks.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sometimes, it's memorable lines that keep us coming back, and the most memorable lines aren't always the most creative, eloquent, or even mesmerizing. Sometimes, they just keep reverberating 'round inside your brain; like, "You look like a shit taken by a shit." LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Sometimes, it's memorable lines that keep us coming back, and the most memorable lines aren't always the most creative, eloquent, or even mesmerizing. Sometimes, they just keep reverberating 'round inside your brain; like, "You look like a shit taken by a shit." LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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We think alike. I laughed for several moments over that!
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
You have a versatile writing style.... I like it. I try to do that with my writing.
What can I say, you mixed humor and sex, two of my favorite things. LoL
Im glad Greg and Jenny celebrated their one-year anniversary.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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You have a versatile writing style.... I like it. I try to do that with my writing.
What can I say, you mixed humor and sex, two of my favorite things. LoL
Im glad Greg and Jenny celebrated their one-year anniversary.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thanks! This review made me smile. We are a lot alike. Thank you for taking the time!
Douglas
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am glad to read that Greg and Jenny celebrated their one-year anniversary. You also know I have a serious crush on Greg. I can't wait to get more into this story.
"What're you going to do with half a bear?" Greg teased her. (In sentences like this, there are only two characters in the scene, you could simply write, 'teased Greg.')
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I am glad to read that Greg and Jenny celebrated their one-year anniversary. You also know I have a serious crush on Greg. I can't wait to get more into this story.
"What're you going to do with half a bear?" Greg teased her. (In sentences like this, there are only two characters in the scene, you could simply write, 'teased Greg.')
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you, great catch. I appreciate you, my friend!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
As ever, Doug, you have a style of writing that can seemingly lend itself to many genres with colour and immediate interest. The dialogue makes this chapter. It's full of humour and wit, especially when added to the drunken capers, and will form an effective contrast to anything more sinister coming up as I'm sure it will. The thought processes work very well too. Excellent! I look forward to reading more now that you've set the scene. Thanks, Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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As ever, Doug, you have a style of writing that can seemingly lend itself to many genres with colour and immediate interest. The dialogue makes this chapter. It's full of humour and wit, especially when added to the drunken capers, and will form an effective contrast to anything more sinister coming up as I'm sure it will. The thought processes work very well too. Excellent! I look forward to reading more now that you've set the scene. Thanks, Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Debbie! You are too kind.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Ok, you have my attention, and so I will muddle along as I did previously.
Your mind has a similarity to ... mine. Naked women and such, tho I do not imbibe in them any longer nor do I drink. Let the next chapter fall!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Ok, you have my attention, and so I will muddle along as I did previously.
Your mind has a similarity to ... mine. Naked women and such, tho I do not imbibe in them any longer nor do I drink. Let the next chapter fall!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Tom. This is a much more enjoyable ride with you in the car!
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Aah - that was nice to read
What car am I riding in?
I always wanted a tour in an XKE 😋
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Who doesn't? If I had an XKE I would be out driving it right now! HA
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I actually had the opportunity to buy one in ?68 After sliding in ( I?m 6?6) I found out I was too tall so I moved on to a Mercedes Ben sports ride which made me feel
Like a prince instead of the pauper I was As A Sailor
Having received a $3200 inheritance from my father?s death I bought a ?69 Vette which I previously found ugly compared to the ?63 split window Vette which was parked next to a ?68. That is when the shark?s engineering lines POPPED and with only a $600 difference between the used ?68 and a
New one I opted in for the payment plan All of this is true
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You've had some sweet rides, my friend! I love the old corvettes.
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Including an 1965 Opel
Station wagon
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice dialoguing.
married a local dinner owner named Jenny. - I know this is only in Authors' Notes, but don't you mean 'diner'?
Is this the same Jenny who serviced the trucker?
How did you get the last paragraph to single space when the rest isn't?
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Nice dialoguing.
married a local dinner owner named Jenny. - I know this is only in Authors' Notes, but don't you mean 'diner'?
Is this the same Jenny who serviced the trucker?
How did you get the last paragraph to single space when the rest isn't?
Best wishes.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Great typo catch. The last paragraph is a system glitch. Cant get it to fix. Jenny is the wife of the lead detective. Lilith is the ?bad guy? who killed the trucker. It?s the fourth book in the series. Greg and Jenny have been the lead characters since book one.
Comment from royowen
I love your writing, it's the sort of genre that I like, I was a great sci-fi reader when young, during a great era of sci-fi, but this is subtly different, more on the realm of sci fantasy, with strong, mildly imperfect protagonists, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I love your writing, it's the sort of genre that I like, I was a great sci-fi reader when young, during a great era of sci-fi, but this is subtly different, more on the realm of sci fantasy, with strong, mildly imperfect protagonists, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Roy! You, Sir, are a blessing to me.
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Thank you Douglas
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice chapter and I am happy that you started to post again for this book. I am curious to see who died:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Nice chapter and I am happy that you started to post again for this book. I am curious to see who died:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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There was a murder in chapter one ?Knockin?.
Now Greg is being called out there.
Thanks. This book has a few twists and turns.
D