Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Aliss is in Love"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
3 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well I wonder what Aliss is getting herself into hey with this guy? Now that guy she's dating is the killer then this has serious creep factor! Some small commas and periods required here and there but that does not take away from the magic of your writing you certainly have a talent and I hope that you continue there's only one thing that can be done about such a great chapter and that is give it a 6 I hope you have a wonderful day and that you have best of luck in 2024!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Well I wonder what Aliss is getting herself into hey with this guy? Now that guy she's dating is the killer then this has serious creep factor! Some small commas and periods required here and there but that does not take away from the magic of your writing you certainly have a talent and I hope that you continue there's only one thing that can be done about such a great chapter and that is give it a 6 I hope you have a wonderful day and that you have best of luck in 2024!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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thank you for your comments. I will look into the corrections. Stay tuned for more on Mark as a child.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written, love story, and I enjoyed it very much. I do wish you the very best with all of your writing. The story moved along well when it was read loud and I enjoyed listening to it. Patricia.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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This is a very well written, love story, and I enjoyed it very much. I do wish you the very best with all of your writing. The story moved along well when it was read loud and I enjoyed listening to it. Patricia.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Patricia - Thank you - stay tuned for more of Mark as a child.
Comment from Jacob1395
I could really feel what Aliss was feeling for her new lover and the anxiety she felt in the opening. I think I probably would've liked to have seen a little more dialogue between them over the dinner to really get a sense of how their relationship is going to move forward, but overall I enjoyed it and I thought it was well written.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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I could really feel what Aliss was feeling for her new lover and the anxiety she felt in the opening. I think I probably would've liked to have seen a little more dialogue between them over the dinner to really get a sense of how their relationship is going to move forward, but overall I enjoyed it and I thought it was well written.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Thank you Jacob - have you read the entire book, so far?