Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter 60"A hidden past, a devastating truth.
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
Another excellent chapter very well written as only in your style can do! Things are moving along very well and interesting And engaging as well! You know issues with grammar or is that a sentenced structure or subject Matter I think you've got a great chapter here best of luck! Have a great day!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Another excellent chapter very well written as only in your style can do! Things are moving along very well and interesting And engaging as well! You know issues with grammar or is that a sentenced structure or subject Matter I think you've got a great chapter here best of luck! Have a great day!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lea.
Comment from karenina
OH geez. Angela is the queen of bad decisions! Isn't this Michell's suite _ or at least supported by her parents? Yet here's good old Angela offering a place for Caz (with whom she's last had a very bad encounter!) No accounting for her stability. Hmmm. So, is Rebecca the daughter of Caz and William? Oh! Of course, you're not going to tell me!
Pins and Needles time!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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OH geez. Angela is the queen of bad decisions! Isn't this Michell's suite _ or at least supported by her parents? Yet here's good old Angela offering a place for Caz (with whom she's last had a very bad encounter!) No accounting for her stability. Hmmm. So, is Rebecca the daughter of Caz and William? Oh! Of course, you're not going to tell me!
Pins and Needles time!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you Karenina.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Back in 2001, now we know what that emotional appearance of Caz was all about. And good old Angela has melted and taken her in, much to Michelle's annoyance. I like the way you've trimmed down the background and continue to make this story so easy to pick up and resume. Another excellent read with no errors noted. Thanks for sharing, Jacob! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Back in 2001, now we know what that emotional appearance of Caz was all about. And good old Angela has melted and taken her in, much to Michelle's annoyance. I like the way you've trimmed down the background and continue to make this story so easy to pick up and resume. Another excellent read with no errors noted. Thanks for sharing, Jacob! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie.
Comment from BethShelby
So Rebecca is not really Angela's daughter. She is Caz and William's child. I know something bad has to happen in order for Rebecca to end up with Angela. You story has a lot of twists an turns.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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So Rebecca is not really Angela's daughter. She is Caz and William's child. I know something bad has to happen in order for Rebecca to end up with Angela. You story has a lot of twists an turns.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you Beth.
Comment from Frank Malley
This is a promising framework for a story about a group of friends, acquaintances, and lovers. I think it's important descriptions, plot turns, and suggestions could be made with fewer words and incidental inclusions. Carefully chosen dialogue and narrative can establish features of a story with fewer but more carefully loaded language. We don't live in the age of Dickens or even Henry James; we are accustomed to fast revelations and generally dislike working through longer strings of words to encounter, yes, some nicely turned phrases, but - unfortunately - a longer way to get where the story's going.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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This is a promising framework for a story about a group of friends, acquaintances, and lovers. I think it's important descriptions, plot turns, and suggestions could be made with fewer words and incidental inclusions. Carefully chosen dialogue and narrative can establish features of a story with fewer but more carefully loaded language. We don't live in the age of Dickens or even Henry James; we are accustomed to fast revelations and generally dislike working through longer strings of words to encounter, yes, some nicely turned phrases, but - unfortunately - a longer way to get where the story's going.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Okay, so Caz is pregnant, but we still have no clue what happened to her or where she's at. I'm beginning to wonder if Rebecca is Caz's baby and Angela raised her. I can't see her going back to William, unless he raped her. That's possible, he's horrible. This is a good write.
to make her see sense. (???)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Okay, so Caz is pregnant, but we still have no clue what happened to her or where she's at. I'm beginning to wonder if Rebecca is Caz's baby and Angela raised her. I can't see her going back to William, unless he raped her. That's possible, he's horrible. This is a good write.
to make her see sense. (???)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you Barbara.