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Me. Her. Him

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A hidden past, a devastating truth.

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Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Ooooo very suspenseful and very dangerous too wow! I really like this chapter! Awesome work and a fine submission! I see no issues with Kramer esthetic sentence structure or subject ma. Very great and interesting chapter to your book. Best to lock looking forward to the next one!

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
    Thank you Lea.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I'm reading this in the wrong order but it fills a little gap now and I'm up to date (can't keep up with you, Jacob!) A fair bit of tension here as, firstly, Angela imagines something's happened to Rebecca and then the call from Michelle gets her more uptight than ever. She's definitely living off her adrenaline. Thanks, Jacob! Debbie

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
    Thank you Debbie.
Comment from karenina
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Oh this woman is a ball of loose threads! Rebecca was just out for gum... She's panicking because Michelle is about to do precisely what she'd hoped... and now she blurts out the big question to Paul!

The expose' has got to be fabulously spine chilling!

Karenina

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
    Thank you Karenina.
reply by karenina on 17-Dec-2023
    :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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The plot thickens and are no closer to answers Jacob, but hopefully we will find out what William has actually done and why Angela is so afraid. Another fine chapter, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
    Thank you Dolly.
Comment from Navada
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Goodness. This is a veritable nest of intrigue! I'm a newcomer to the story so I'm working to piece things together. I get a sense of the tension and dread Angela is feeling and the many tentacles of uncertainty in her life.
One little typo I noticed in the phrase "stare at the photo I took off William's address: - I think you mean "of". This is certainly an interesting tale - I might need to read a few more chapters and see what happens next!

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
    Thank you and for pointing out the error as well.
reply by Navada on 17-Dec-2023
    You're welcome!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I truly hope they seriously talk, and things get out in the open. There's been too many secrets. I do like this story.

The story so far: (is almost longer than your posts. You might want to consider condensing it.)

'I'll call you Angela, I promise.' (For sure a comma is needed after 'you,' I would write this ''I'll call you Angela. I promise.' As two sentences it more dramatic.)

'Angela, we need to sit down and talk about this.' (you can omit 'down', it's understood)

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
    Thank you Barbara.
Comment from BethShelby
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You are very clever with your clift hangers. Thankfully you don't keep us waiting long. There is so much going on and this is really seems to be getting tpo an interesting spot. I think Angela acts very impulsively and often lets her actions get her into trouble.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
    Thank you Beth.