I am a Room
The room is the narrator13 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I truly enjoyed this. It is stark, but it is warming at the same time. This is some real talent here. Good luck in the contest. Keep writing. Have a good weekend. Karen
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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I truly enjoyed this. It is stark, but it is warming at the same time. This is some real talent here. Good luck in the contest. Keep writing. Have a good weekend. Karen
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Karen. I was on Fanstory years ago. l'm back and plan to stay. -Bill
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Have a good week. :-) Karen
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Thank you, Karen. I am a recent returnee. Please consider the few pieces I wrote before I left. Especially Christal With An I. -Bill
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Well, that's a cool slant: personifying a room! Imaginative and clever, indeed. My husband is Catholic, so I recognize what room that is! (He spent a LOT of time in it as a child, he says...)
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Well, that's a cool slant: personifying a room! Imaginative and clever, indeed. My husband is Catholic, so I recognize what room that is! (He spent a LOT of time in it as a child, he says...)
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Great humorous insight. Isn't guilt wonderful?
Thanks for the review.
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I'm Jewish. For us, a day without guilt means we just didn't try hard enough.
Comment from royowen
I guess a room is anywhere where we can ponder, consider and perhaps ckme to learning to forgive ourselves, it's sometimes easier to forgive others than ourselves, we have to live within ourselves after all, but we must remember we're not perfect, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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I guess a room is anywhere where we can ponder, consider and perhaps ckme to learning to forgive ourselves, it's sometimes easier to forgive others than ourselves, we have to live within ourselves after all, but we must remember we're not perfect, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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I'm not sure we are really capable of forgiving others until we can forgive ourselves.
Thanks for a wonderful review. Yes. I'm new here.
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Could be
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting, thoughtful and reflective poem, well composed, and showing originality. The last stanza offers hope for release from the imprisonment of thoughts of grief, pain, guilt and regret, a positive ending.
Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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An interesting, thoughtful and reflective poem, well composed, and showing originality. The last stanza offers hope for release from the imprisonment of thoughts of grief, pain, guilt and regret, a positive ending.
Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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This is indeed a sobering review of family but I needed to also offer us hope.
Thanks for the review.
Comment from Aiona
What a poignant poem. I usually don't care for free verse, but this one touches me. Is the room his mind? Or a literal room? Or both! :) It's a poem to make me ponder! I hope he goes to the other room.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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What a poignant poem. I usually don't care for free verse, but this one touches me. Is the room his mind? Or a literal room? Or both! :) It's a poem to make me ponder! I hope he goes to the other room.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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At least he isn't stuck. He can go to the other room.
Thanks for a wonderful review.
Comment from Daylily
This is an excellent poem for the Repetition contest. There are times when we box ourselves in because we cannot bear to feel the full force of pain, loss, or disappointment. I especially like this concluding verse where hope is present for finally moving forward into the better spaces of living...and the light of forgiveness is strong.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent poem for the Repetition contest. There are times when we box ourselves in because we cannot bear to feel the full force of pain, loss, or disappointment. I especially like this concluding verse where hope is present for finally moving forward into the better spaces of living...and the light of forgiveness is strong.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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I wanted to be honest but also hopeful. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like your repetition poem. The room holds many emotions inside. It is kind of like one's self when you keep everything inside and have no one to talk to, so you can release your feelings.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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I like your repetition poem. The room holds many emotions inside. It is kind of like one's self when you keep everything inside and have no one to talk to, so you can release your feelings.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Family can be very painful but in the end, hopeful.
Thanks for the review.
Comment from jim vecchio
Your repeating was a lot smoother than the food at our Christmas Party last night. This was a very clever approach to the "Repetition Contest." Sometimes, we have to ponder on and write out our failures, as writers, but it is good to know we have a place for Release.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Your repeating was a lot smoother than the food at our Christmas Party last night. This was a very clever approach to the "Repetition Contest." Sometimes, we have to ponder on and write out our failures, as writers, but it is good to know we have a place for Release.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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For me, this is therapy.
Thanks for the review.
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I am thankful God gave me the urge to, and allows me to, write. Otherwise, my life would be truly empty.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written poem for the contest, and I wish you the very best in the contest. I'd like the idea of repeating the one line in each of the stanzas. Patricia.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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This is a well written poem for the contest, and I wish you the very best in the contest. I'd like the idea of repeating the one line in each of the stanzas. Patricia.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your wonderful review.
Comment from JSD
Fourth line. 'comes to me'?
You have used the prompt of repetition very well here and written a very successful poem. Intriguing ideas. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Fourth line. 'comes to me'?
You have used the prompt of repetition very well here and written a very successful poem. Intriguing ideas. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your review.