Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Funeral Home"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
3 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi, Eileen!
I saw and felt your characters perfectly and in-depth for such a short chapter. I'm unsure if a funeral home would be my first choice of work, and it seems it wasn't your young male character's choice either. Great chapter! Best JohnC
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Hi, Eileen!
I saw and felt your characters perfectly and in-depth for such a short chapter. I'm unsure if a funeral home would be my first choice of work, and it seems it wasn't your young male character's choice either. Great chapter! Best JohnC
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your review! all input is greatly appreciated.
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I was shadowing your male character's dislike for working in a funeral home. I'd hate to be in his shoes! :) Great chapter, Eileen
Comment from Lea Tonin1
OMG the creep factor the gross factor is the horror factor and the holy s***I'm scared factor has indeed infected your chapter!
I see no issues with grammar sentence structure punctuation subject matter. Even though it's creepy and frozen gooey and intensely fasci. Think it's awesome have a great night having that's a luck to you!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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OMG the creep factor the gross factor is the horror factor and the holy s***I'm scared factor has indeed infected your chapter!
I see no issues with grammar sentence structure punctuation subject matter. Even though it's creepy and frozen gooey and intensely fasci. Think it's awesome have a great night having that's a luck to you!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your kind words!
Comment from Austin Yu
As your description says, you have a big imagination! I loved your story and got a little teary-eyed. I felt as if I was getting ready for the funeral with the characters in the story. Good luck!!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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As your description says, you have a big imagination! I loved your story and got a little teary-eyed. I felt as if I was getting ready for the funeral with the characters in the story. Good luck!!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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I appreciate your comments and stay tuned for more!