Me. Her. Him
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Comment from karenina
What a two timing druggie. When he said, "I just had to tell you I'm sorry, and if you're prepared to take me back..."
I said now there's a manipulator! Take him back?
She's never had him!
This story must be working because my blood pressure is rising!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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What a two timing druggie. When he said, "I just had to tell you I'm sorry, and if you're prepared to take me back..."
I said now there's a manipulator! Take him back?
She's never had him!
This story must be working because my blood pressure is rising!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Thank you Karenina.
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Oh, it's getting exciting now!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It seems Angela has fallen under William's spell and at least he has apologised o for what he said, but somehow I don't quite believe him.
Suggestion for this line:
(I was (a) dick)
Another fine chapter Jacob, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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It seems Angela has fallen under William's spell and at least he has apologised o for what he said, but somehow I don't quite believe him.
Suggestion for this line:
(I was (a) dick)
Another fine chapter Jacob, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Dolly.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh dear, that was a bit casual at the end. Is he still playing a game with her. Your dialogue is excellent, Jacob, so realistic and convincing and I'm absolutely intrigued by Angela's dilemma and what she does now. "I look off at Stevie.." seemed a strange expression? But this is excellent and a real page turner (so to speak). Thank you Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Oh dear, that was a bit casual at the end. Is he still playing a game with her. Your dialogue is excellent, Jacob, so realistic and convincing and I'm absolutely intrigued by Angela's dilemma and what she does now. "I look off at Stevie.." seemed a strange expression? But this is excellent and a real page turner (so to speak). Thank you Debbie
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie
Comment from patcelaw
Another well written chapter in your book. I enjoyed listening to it, and it flows as well. I didn't see any grammatical errors or any typos so you're good to go. Have a good day and God bless. Patric
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Another well written chapter in your book. I enjoyed listening to it, and it flows as well. I didn't see any grammatical errors or any typos so you're good to go. Have a good day and God bless. Patric
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm sitting at my computer yelling at Angela. She's just a dummy. She needs to run as far away from William as possible. This is a good write.
Of course he wasn't going to let me forget that. (comma after 'course')
'So why did you tell me that all you were interested in was (comma after 'So')
Could I move in with William if that happenes? (happens, unless UK spelling)
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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I'm sitting at my computer yelling at Angela. She's just a dummy. She needs to run as far away from William as possible. This is a good write.
Of course he wasn't going to let me forget that. (comma after 'course')
'So why did you tell me that all you were interested in was (comma after 'So')
Could I move in with William if that happenes? (happens, unless UK spelling)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Barbara.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well, that was quite an encounter. Hey she wants and she don't want very very confusing for her. A well written chapter you brought me there with the character so great job! I see no issues with grammar punctuation sentence structure or subject matter. A great submission! I hope you have a great day Jacob!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Well, that was quite an encounter. Hey she wants and she don't want very very confusing for her. A well written chapter you brought me there with the character so great job! I see no issues with grammar punctuation sentence structure or subject matter. A great submission! I hope you have a great day Jacob!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lea.
Comment from BethShelby
You have her playing with fire but unless that was the case you wouldn't have a great plot for a story. I'll go with the flow and try to stop wanting to shake some sense into Angela's head. Your characters seem very real, and we start to think we know them.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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You have her playing with fire but unless that was the case you wouldn't have a great plot for a story. I'll go with the flow and try to stop wanting to shake some sense into Angela's head. Your characters seem very real, and we start to think we know them.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Beth.