Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter 41"A hidden past, a devastating truth.
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Comment from karenina
What a shocker. The manipulative drug dealer who cheats on his girlfriend is now proclaiming he'd like Angela as a side order, but not the main entree. What a creep! I fear there's more to his misogyny than we've seen. Likely a lot more than him grabbing her arm. I'd have been screaming bloody murder and spilling the beans to Caz by now! Love that we're getting in the thick of the action...
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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What a shocker. The manipulative drug dealer who cheats on his girlfriend is now proclaiming he'd like Angela as a side order, but not the main entree. What a creep! I fear there's more to his misogyny than we've seen. Likely a lot more than him grabbing her arm. I'd have been screaming bloody murder and spilling the beans to Caz by now! Love that we're getting in the thick of the action...
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Karenina
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You bet!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, this is interesting, share a "piece" between friends, and more over that "piece" is danger on two legs. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Wow, this is interesting, share a "piece" between friends, and more over that "piece" is danger on two legs. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This definitely will draw the reader in: "She hoped never to see him again, and now, she fears he's discovered her secret, which she must protect her family from." This is like a show we could watch on tv. It is well developed and the tension naturally builds. The plot thickens: "He's grinning at me, and then he leans in to kiss me on my neck. I push him back. I open my mouth to say something but close it, disgust building inside me." She's brave. This is well done.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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This definitely will draw the reader in: "She hoped never to see him again, and now, she fears he's discovered her secret, which she must protect her family from." This is like a show we could watch on tv. It is well developed and the tension naturally builds. The plot thickens: "He's grinning at me, and then he leans in to kiss me on my neck. I push him back. I open my mouth to say something but close it, disgust building inside me." She's brave. This is well done.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Liz.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ooh, now we see it! The true William coming out. Good for Angela putting him firmly in his place . But how embarrassing for her! This is very well done and helps to speed up pace here as we wonder about what's going to happen. There are some issues with apostrophes: At the last minute Michelle decided she was going to her parents('); I see William chatting to one of the guys (no apostrophe); She's away at her parents(',); The last conversation (William and I). Excellent! No wonder I was missing out on chapters, these are coming thick and fast...:) Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Ooh, now we see it! The true William coming out. Good for Angela putting him firmly in his place . But how embarrassing for her! This is very well done and helps to speed up pace here as we wonder about what's going to happen. There are some issues with apostrophes: At the last minute Michelle decided she was going to her parents('); I see William chatting to one of the guys (no apostrophe); She's away at her parents(',); The last conversation (William and I). Excellent! No wonder I was missing out on chapters, these are coming thick and fast...:) Debbie
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, there is a bit of action in this chapter as William shows his true colours and just wants to used Angela, as he has used others. I am glad Angela has stuck up for herself and I wonder what the consequences will be, I liked this feisty chapter Jacob, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Oh my goodness, there is a bit of action in this chapter as William shows his true colours and just wants to used Angela, as he has used others. I am glad Angela has stuck up for herself and I wonder what the consequences will be, I liked this feisty chapter Jacob, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you Dolly.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Is that William is a dirty bird! Good for her smartening up and standing up for herself! The who done it mystery gets deeper and deeper you've got some interesting characters revolving around each other. A fine addition to your chapters indeed! I see no issues with grammar or aesthetics. I find it to be quite competent writing and talented as well keep on going! Find submission best of luck and I hope you have an awesome day!
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Is that William is a dirty bird! Good for her smartening up and standing up for herself! The who done it mystery gets deeper and deeper you've got some interesting characters revolving around each other. A fine addition to your chapters indeed! I see no issues with grammar or aesthetics. I find it to be quite competent writing and talented as well keep on going! Find submission best of luck and I hope you have an awesome day!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lea.
Comment from Sarita Méndez
The story becomes more and more mysterious! I'm curious to see if Angela really is a murderer, and how much William is a bad guy...
Thank you for sharing your book.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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The story becomes more and more mysterious! I'm curious to see if Angela really is a murderer, and how much William is a bad guy...
Thank you for sharing your book.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The real William is showing himself now and Angela is right to put an end to any possible relationship with him. I am pretty sure he is not a man to take this lightly. I am enjoying this story. Good writing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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The real William is showing himself now and Angela is right to put an end to any possible relationship with him. I am pretty sure he is not a man to take this lightly. I am enjoying this story. Good writing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you Barbara.
Comment from BethShelby
She is saying for him to leave her alone now, but I don't know if she means it. I'm wondering if they sleep together willingly or he forces himself on her since she believes she is disgusted with him ane wants him to leave.
You have made Williams character out to be a low life. Caz, in some ways,doesn't seem all that much better.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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She is saying for him to leave her alone now, but I don't know if she means it. I'm wondering if they sleep together willingly or he forces himself on her since she believes she is disgusted with him ane wants him to leave.
You have made Williams character out to be a low life. Caz, in some ways,doesn't seem all that much better.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you Beth.
Comment from patcelaw
This is another very well written chapter in your book, and it was a pleasure to listen to. I wish you the very best with your book and with your other writing as well. May you have a good day and may God bless you. Patricia
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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This is another very well written chapter in your book, and it was a pleasure to listen to. I wish you the very best with your book and with your other writing as well. May you have a good day and may God bless you. Patricia
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you.