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Me. Her. Him

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A hidden past, a devastating truth.

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Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Ah she's finally gonna spill the beans! Now is she a killer or is she not the mystery depends!
Very well written and jacob another fine addition to your story! I've seen no issues with grammar aesthetics subject matter or Sentence structure. A great entry on a great day good luck to you have an awesome afternoon!

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
    Thank you Lea.
Comment from karenina
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This is a short one! I do like your descriptions, very British sounding! (Imagine that...)

Why would Michelle go all the way to Angela's place of work to leave a note, rather than, say, on the kitchen table?

Hmmm.

Sounds like mysterious behavior.

I do think you might have added a few more paragraphs to this chapter...

Nothing was really advanced here and hey, what's up with William?

(smile)

Karenina

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
    Thank you Karenina.
reply by karenina on 28-Nov-2023
    Looking forward to the next chapters!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Nothing much happening in this chapter and a lunch date is arranges with Michelle in the note she left. I am wondering when William is going to turn up Jacob? Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
    Thank you Dolly.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I hope Michelle is ready to talk. I am curious what will happen. I like this background information. I do like this story and you're doing a great job writing. Thank you for sharing it with us.

which would've knocked me off my feat if I was going any quicker. (feet??)

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
    Thank you Barbara, and for spotting that error as well.
Comment from BethShelby
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Angela is relieved that Michelle seem to be coming around. She seems to get along with the rest of the group at the flat, but she's not broken the ice yet with her coworken on the new job. I wonder if the conversation at lunch will involve Caz.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
    Thank you Beth.