Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Grey"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
15 total reviews
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Challenging, determined and forthcoming. You write like youre reliving the moment as it is penned. continue the hard work... this next book even feels like it may be better than the first. Congratulations on your accolades for Ghost. This one will get even more.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Challenging, determined and forthcoming. You write like youre reliving the moment as it is penned. continue the hard work... this next book even feels like it may be better than the first. Congratulations on your accolades for Ghost. This one will get even more.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the awesome review. And for the time goods, they are very precious to me. Thank you also for stopping in for a read and offering your comments and for the fine rating.Thank you for that too! I hope you have a great day!
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is a heart wrenching story, the fact that it's listed as autobiographical, I assume, your own.
This, only being a single chapter out of context, I have to make certain deductions.
Mostly I would say that you are a victim of injustice piled on circumstance. We all make life decisions, some of which we may regret later in life, but ultimately they are what created the person we are today.
Your mother and sisters. I have no words.
I assume they are feeding those you care about with twisted tales from your past, maybe even your present. But they are wrong. The only shame is sex work is the shame found in others condeming it.
In itself, it is a job and one that requires hard work in often less than ideal circumstances.
Unless someone is being forced into it against their will then there s no condemnation.
Of all the character personalities i dislike the most, hypocracy and victimisation are way up there.
Sorry, I digress.
Sending my warmest regards
Tim
PS Deter - not Deture
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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This is a heart wrenching story, the fact that it's listed as autobiographical, I assume, your own.
This, only being a single chapter out of context, I have to make certain deductions.
Mostly I would say that you are a victim of injustice piled on circumstance. We all make life decisions, some of which we may regret later in life, but ultimately they are what created the person we are today.
Your mother and sisters. I have no words.
I assume they are feeding those you care about with twisted tales from your past, maybe even your present. But they are wrong. The only shame is sex work is the shame found in others condeming it.
In itself, it is a job and one that requires hard work in often less than ideal circumstances.
Unless someone is being forced into it against their will then there s no condemnation.
Of all the character personalities i dislike the most, hypocracy and victimisation are way up there.
Sorry, I digress.
Sending my warmest regards
Tim
PS Deter - not Deture
Comment Written 26-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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Hi Deter, thank you so much. I appreciate this and your review on your kind and insightful comments. There are 3 books to this writing that you're reading. The first one is called "Ghost" Ii is currently released globally. Speaks of my childhood. Speaks of fear and blood and starvation and survival. It also exposes our social services and my family for cover up of these incidences.I should say years of it. My family being in different spots within the ministry, was able to make this happen. Flip two covers the period where I went from, the pan to the fire and my complete inability to deal with the world as it is, and and not what I imagined it to be. Never learn you see was never taught. Thank you again. I appreciate this so much. I'm happy at you. Rself and for reading what a fine and thorough review. Thank you.Thanks and have an awesome night!
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Hi Lea,
Thank you for your response to my review, I shall certainly add your work to my TBR list. It's long so it may take me a while to get to it, But it shall be done.
As a slight aside.
I am Tim ;)
The PS was probably not clear but I just pointed out a word slip in your writing that slapped me as I read past, you used the word Deture when you should have used Deter.
A minor thing which is why I just mentioned it in passing in a PS
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Got it! Great eye you have there. I've ahead and fixed it. Thank you Tim!
Comment from Gayla putnam
Honestly, I could not follow the story until it was in bold type. At that point, I remembered a previous chapter. I found it very confusing to have the part about the family and then switch to the young girl hustling up men. You might want to correct some spelling mistakes in the first part. It's a powerful, painful story. gayla
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Honestly, I could not follow the story until it was in bold type. At that point, I remembered a previous chapter. I found it very confusing to have the part about the family and then switch to the young girl hustling up men. You might want to correct some spelling mistakes in the first part. It's a powerful, painful story. gayla
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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The chapter is written in present tense. First then passed hence, then back to present tense again. It speaks of how i'm feeling before I write it and then it speaks of how i'm feeling after I write it. This is also book 2 and a chapter in the middle of the I'm not surprised that you're a little confused when coming on the middle of book 2.I understand what you're saying. So this is chapter five book, two in the middle of a story. I start my chapters with a little piece of poetry. Then I write in present tense, then I go back in time. To continue my memory once i've written that then I return to present tense again. Every chapter is consistent like that. This is an autobiography, the first book ghost. It's currently up on market. I will certainly go ahead and run it through spell. Check too. Thank you very much for your review and your kind rating. I appreciate these kinds of comments to get the reader's point of view so that I might improve as I go. Thank you again!, I hope you have a great day!
Comment from royowen
Quite a story you've written here, I remember the previous one I read combined with a couple of others I read, seemed to suck the life out of me, and rehoused suppressed memories I have. The rispetto poem I wrote was called grief, beautifully written, blessings Roy ,
Typo : I said the (serenty) prayer. serenity?
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Quite a story you've written here, I remember the previous one I read combined with a couple of others I read, seemed to suck the life out of me, and rehoused suppressed memories I have. The rispetto poem I wrote was called grief, beautifully written, blessings Roy ,
Typo : I said the (serenty) prayer. serenity?
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Roy.I appreciate you and your comments and your great rating! I will go ahead, check that word until again.Have an awesome day.I look for always to your comments!
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Well done
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This chapter feels like there was a manipulative level of deception going on. What that friend was having you do was much more than 'a new way of doing things' or teaching someone to be 'independent.' But since that is the main motivation that the friend stated aloud, I thought I would add a few suggestions on punctuation, here re-written:
"I told you. I'm teaching you a new way of doing things, a way to keep a roof over your head. Be independent!" she answered. "I mean, you can't stay here forever. Mom will find out eventually. So let's get this done, so I don't have to worry about you."
It sounds like all the men around you in this chapter were users and abusers.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This chapter feels like there was a manipulative level of deception going on. What that friend was having you do was much more than 'a new way of doing things' or teaching someone to be 'independent.' But since that is the main motivation that the friend stated aloud, I thought I would add a few suggestions on punctuation, here re-written:
"I told you. I'm teaching you a new way of doing things, a way to keep a roof over your head. Be independent!" she answered. "I mean, you can't stay here forever. Mom will find out eventually. So let's get this done, so I don't have to worry about you."
It sounds like all the men around you in this chapter were users and abusers.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Oh yes, I didn't know what I was doing or who I was picking or anything about people per se. I knew I was in my home that's about it. Thank you for reading. I appreciate this so very much. Thank you for your fine review as well I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Again, thank you for sharing. I know this is hard to write, but I also know it will help you and help others in a similar situation.
"Ya, I'm okay. Im coming out." I said. (I'm coming out," I said.)
"Hurry up! We gotta get ready!" She said. (she said.)
"All we do is entertain men. Talk with them, dance with them, party with them. Make them feel special. Men pay for that.""Why?" I asked. (two people speaking in same paragraph, they get their own paragraph, so 'for that."
"Why?" I asked.)
he cab arrived at the club took care of the fare and there I was. (club, took care of the fare, and there)
I thought, "Thank God he's otherwise occupied." (thought should be in italics.)
"Hey! E baby. We're over here!" (comm after 'E baby,")
One Of the men, a Ginger (of)
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Again, thank you for sharing. I know this is hard to write, but I also know it will help you and help others in a similar situation.
"Ya, I'm okay. Im coming out." I said. (I'm coming out," I said.)
"Hurry up! We gotta get ready!" She said. (she said.)
"All we do is entertain men. Talk with them, dance with them, party with them. Make them feel special. Men pay for that.""Why?" I asked. (two people speaking in same paragraph, they get their own paragraph, so 'for that."
"Why?" I asked.)
he cab arrived at the club took care of the fare and there I was. (club, took care of the fare, and there)
I thought, "Thank God he's otherwise occupied." (thought should be in italics.)
"Hey! E baby. We're over here!" (comm after 'E baby,")
One Of the men, a Ginger (of)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you Again! Always happy to see you here and read your comments which are so valuable to me Thank you for your fine rating your time and your great review. Suggestions for edit all of that is wonderful to me!
Comment from LJbutterfly
It is very difficult to learn about life when you have to experience everything and teach yourself. That is why some people never learn, and keep doing the same things over and over, but expecting different outcomes their entire life.
I don't know what change you made to get you to where you are today, but I'm glad you made it. By the way, your poetry is always heartfelt, and your artwork beautiful.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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It is very difficult to learn about life when you have to experience everything and teach yourself. That is why some people never learn, and keep doing the same things over and over, but expecting different outcomes their entire life.
I don't know what change you made to get you to where you are today, but I'm glad you made it. By the way, your poetry is always heartfelt, and your artwork beautiful.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you, my friend, thank you again soon. You will find out what happens beyond that humming, there's definitely crossroads in my life. Well, I've had to choose one way or the other. And life is a crap shoot I think. Not fair but we get to get used to it. Thank you for your kind and wonderful review. So happy to see you here asked always! I hope you enjoy your evening!
Comment from Jim Wile
I think it's admirable that you wanted to shield your children from the horrors of your upbringing, but now that your mother is attempting to brainwash them with lies about you, perhaps it's time to let them know what a complete shit your mother was, that she is a compulsive liar, and that she is misleading them. If you shared this story with them, maybe you could stay where you are and be able to see your grandchildren. It's such a shame that she continues to try to destroy your life, but she's feeling desperate now as the truth is coming out.
Today's chapter was very sad as you are getting sucked into a terrible lifestyle for such a creative and talented person like you, Lea. It's a terrible lifestyle for any woman, in my opinion, but especially bad for someone who has so much potential and talent to be successful in virtually any job you put your mind to. As a hooker, you are subordinating your life to the wants of your johns and giving up your own freedom. It's not far different from what you were facing at home as you grew up.
It will be interesting to see how far down this road you ended up going. It sounds like you quickly realized how the only real advantage to this lifestyle was that it was better than what you came from, but that was a pretty low standard to surpass. - Jim
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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I think it's admirable that you wanted to shield your children from the horrors of your upbringing, but now that your mother is attempting to brainwash them with lies about you, perhaps it's time to let them know what a complete shit your mother was, that she is a compulsive liar, and that she is misleading them. If you shared this story with them, maybe you could stay where you are and be able to see your grandchildren. It's such a shame that she continues to try to destroy your life, but she's feeling desperate now as the truth is coming out.
Today's chapter was very sad as you are getting sucked into a terrible lifestyle for such a creative and talented person like you, Lea. It's a terrible lifestyle for any woman, in my opinion, but especially bad for someone who has so much potential and talent to be successful in virtually any job you put your mind to. As a hooker, you are subordinating your life to the wants of your johns and giving up your own freedom. It's not far different from what you were facing at home as you grew up.
It will be interesting to see how far down this road you ended up going. It sounds like you quickly realized how the only real advantage to this lifestyle was that it was better than what you came from, but that was a pretty low standard to surpass. - Jim
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Well my friend Jim my rage kicked in and when that happens stuff happens. Thank God. He gave me a few brain cells to figure things out as quickly as I could. Some people never figure it out. Thank you for your words of support. They really give me back bones. So I can stand up and keep up the good fight. So many like yourself have offered this to me and I am overwhelmed with gratitude. Thank you again for your fine review and your fine rating. You're always so thorough and kind when you do so. I hope you have the most amazing day!
Comment from BethShelby
E was the wrong person to have gotten mixed up with, but it seems at the time you left your parents home, you didn't have a choice. Like most girls who eventually become prostitutes, they were innocent at one time, and circumstances let them to make unfortunate choices. All of could have likely been persuaded in those circumstances to have gone with the only choice that seemed open. Your mother has built her own story to perserve her own self image and apparently she tells it convincingly. I hope your son will see through her version. It depends on what he wants to believe. Sometimes it takes a while for truth to surface.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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E was the wrong person to have gotten mixed up with, but it seems at the time you left your parents home, you didn't have a choice. Like most girls who eventually become prostitutes, they were innocent at one time, and circumstances let them to make unfortunate choices. All of could have likely been persuaded in those circumstances to have gone with the only choice that seemed open. Your mother has built her own story to perserve her own self image and apparently she tells it convincingly. I hope your son will see through her version. It depends on what he wants to believe. Sometimes it takes a while for truth to surface.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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My son well. I think he's acting out of precaution cause he has 3 daughters. He just want to stay back until it clears up. I understand that he also doesn't know or my other son. They don't know about how terrible it was. I don't want them to think of their ground parents as shit like I do. Beth and always happy to see you here!! You have been an amazing support. And you help me stand up when I need help Can I appreciate you and all that you say and do thank you again!
Comment from JSD
I too am running out of words to deal with the terrible things you have ghost-walked into. But you also apologise about your responses to my reviews. Please don't fret about that. A simple 'Thank you' is sufficient. Save your time for yourself. X
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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I too am running out of words to deal with the terrible things you have ghost-walked into. But you also apologise about your responses to my reviews. Please don't fret about that. A simple 'Thank you' is sufficient. Save your time for yourself. X
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you john you're the best! And i'm saying again how much I appreciate you have a good day!