Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter Twenty"A hidden past, a devastating truth.
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
You are a very good writer! This is a very good chapter I was interested all the way through It shitty when jealousy misunderstanding or miscommunication get in the way of stuff. Yeah I hope they figure it out i'm sure it's just a misunderstanding. The end was a cliff hanger though found that interesting! I see no issues with grammar punctuation aesthetics or sentence structure. You've got a really cool interesting story going on here. I hope you continue to write it I think it's an awesome entry you know hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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You are a very good writer! This is a very good chapter I was interested all the way through It shitty when jealousy misunderstanding or miscommunication get in the way of stuff. Yeah I hope they figure it out i'm sure it's just a misunderstanding. The end was a cliff hanger though found that interesting! I see no issues with grammar punctuation aesthetics or sentence structure. You've got a really cool interesting story going on here. I hope you continue to write it I think it's an awesome entry you know hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you Lea, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from karenina
Oh, this is a fine chapter! Angie seems to be coming apart at the seams, so much paranoia! (But is it, if they're really out to get you?)
She's in a whirlwind of emotions and trying desperately to hide the secret of "Rebecca" as well as whatever happened to Caz!
What was the catalyst, after all these years, for William to be back and menacing her?
What is Paul up to with all that texting?
Nicely presented and I'm yet again anxious for the next chapter to unfold!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Oh, this is a fine chapter! Angie seems to be coming apart at the seams, so much paranoia! (But is it, if they're really out to get you?)
She's in a whirlwind of emotions and trying desperately to hide the secret of "Rebecca" as well as whatever happened to Caz!
What was the catalyst, after all these years, for William to be back and menacing her?
What is Paul up to with all that texting?
Nicely presented and I'm yet again anxious for the next chapter to unfold!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you Karenina, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Oh, yes. Things are ramping up!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This situation is really taking its toll on Angela and she is in turmoil about what is going on in her life right now and she seems suspicious of every one, including her husband. Perhaps she has good reason for this and we will see as your story unfolds, fine chapter Jacob, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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This situation is really taking its toll on Angela and she is in turmoil about what is going on in her life right now and she seems suspicious of every one, including her husband. Perhaps she has good reason for this and we will see as your story unfolds, fine chapter Jacob, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you Dolly.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Angela is now in a car accident. I'm curious at what point is she going to confide in someone about all of this. She's getting herself in deeper and deeper. I can't wait to see how you're going to get this solved. I enjoyed reading and this is a good write.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Angela is now in a car accident. I'm curious at what point is she going to confide in someone about all of this. She's getting herself in deeper and deeper. I can't wait to see how you're going to get this solved. I enjoyed reading and this is a good write.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you Barbara!
Comment from BethShelby
Michelle isn't having a good weekend. She goes to see her friend preform and then sees her having an antimated conversation with William. You mention she spotted you and didn't come over but later you say she didn't see you are know you were there. Maybe second thoughts. Anyway, It seems as if she is jealous William is trying to take her friend. I'll be waiting for what is next.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Michelle isn't having a good weekend. She goes to see her friend preform and then sees her having an antimated conversation with William. You mention she spotted you and didn't come over but later you say she didn't see you are know you were there. Maybe second thoughts. Anyway, It seems as if she is jealous William is trying to take her friend. I'll be waiting for what is next.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you Beth.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Overall, this fiction chapter effectively blends internal conflicts with external events, keeping readers engaged and eager to discover the consequences of the car accident and the unfolding drama in the protagonist's life.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Overall, this fiction chapter effectively blends internal conflicts with external events, keeping readers engaged and eager to discover the consequences of the car accident and the unfolding drama in the protagonist's life.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from prettybluebirds
You missed the word (to) in the sentence, (to) swallow me up. Other than that, the story is nicely written. You take the reader into the mind of your main character in an excellent manner. It is like we are there with her. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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You missed the word (to) in the sentence, (to) swallow me up. Other than that, the story is nicely written. You take the reader into the mind of your main character in an excellent manner. It is like we are there with her. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, this is building nicely, Jacob! I guessed a little before you said, that William would have been the one Kirsty bee-lined for. But no wonder Angela's head is spinning as she wonders what else William is prepared to do to sabotage her life. This is such a readable story with mystery, emotion, conflict and now....a cliff-hanger accident. No errors noted. Looking forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Wow, this is building nicely, Jacob! I guessed a little before you said, that William would have been the one Kirsty bee-lined for. But no wonder Angela's head is spinning as she wonders what else William is prepared to do to sabotage her life. This is such a readable story with mystery, emotion, conflict and now....a cliff-hanger accident. No errors noted. Looking forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.