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2023 Gypsy's Haiku

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Comment from GWHARGIS
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This was such a good poem. I liked the atmospheric feel. I could picture the cemetery with the fall leaves fluttering adding the colors of autumn to gray of headstones. Silence speaks louder than words. Gretchen

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This poem is very well written and leave a little mystery with us, and an unsettling emotion. I enjoyed reading. Once again, your presentation is perfect to get the maximum effect from your readers.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you very much to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
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What a picture of the cemetery and this was a wonderful haiku, Gypsy. Your words were simply that- they included a cemetery and dead silence. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you very much to read and review my poem. Blessed be.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by aryr on 22-Nov-2023
    Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from lyenochka
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I would expect it to be "dead silent" in a cemetery. Fun wordplay in your haiku which plays on the dead people and descriptive of the kind of silence. The theme of silence and quiet is clear throughout.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you, Big Sister, I am happy you like it. It's a little scary or creepy. How are you doing? Are you having thanksgiving dinner at your house?

    love,
    marival
reply by lyenochka on 22-Nov-2023
    Yes, so much to do while getting to dental appointments and medical appointments!
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

Nice Haiku! Do like your illustration and color scheme, which complement your poem.i

Last line alternative: in dead silence?

Enjoy your Turkey Day.

Mark

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you, Mark. I want dead 'silent' because it's a juxtaposition of 'dead people' and the way they are. I don't want 'silence' because that noun would be more general to the area. Thank you for the suggestion.
    Thank you for the review :)
Comment from shelley kaye
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i'm not sure about the "silent"
i kept wanting to say "dead silence"
but that could be just me lol

great imagery with the red leaves and a bloody death

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    I was thinking the 'dead' are 'silent' but I had two people suggest 'silence' so I changed it. Thanks.

    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from R C Larlham
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The double meaning of the last line is beautifully done. It just sort of sneaked up on my consciousness. I had to go back and check to see whether I had read it right. Haiku is definitely not my thing, but this gave me a new perspective. I may try a couple of my own. Well done!

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read my poem. Thank you for the exceptional review.

    Gypsy hugs