Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

Yep, with eyes like this little creature, who wouldn't want to run for cover. Another clever bit of writing that seems to come very naturally to you. Hope to have you standing high on the podium.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

I took time to find the right mouse with the right look ,

you can see how much kicks he gets scaring the poor lady of the house .. those eyes are very revealing.😂

It was in the booth beginning last week .. when I voted and the page opened I saw it had one vote .. near closing time, it receive a second vote which later JSD took me he gave.

Three entries got one vote and one zero votes ..so I did not bad from that perspective. 😐

LisaMay won with seven votes : The Hungry Mouse

Comment from JPGeo

Excellent

This is definitely the most mischievous of the contest mice. I love the idea, the pic and the little internal rhyme. I'll bet this one scores many votes. Best of luck in the contest!
Cheers!!

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023

Thank you for the kind feedback.

I just voted for Marvin so the page opened..no votes so you lost your bet.

I still had fun writing it .. I took time to find the right pic to match this mischievous mouse.

Take care!

Comment from rhonnie69

Exceptional

"Ciao, Mousy my dear. I'm the cat in our spat.
You don't have to tell the cat that you are a mouse.

You are the mouse of our house. I'm just your spouse.

I know how much you love your cat.
So I thank you whirly-girly I can live with that."

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2023

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

A veery good quatrain fulfilling the contest stipulation. Just a small concern: That third line might be more suitable as" "I get my kicks..." Just q small matter, but in this contest, everything will count!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023

It?s late here 23.40 and I need to used my PC but first thing in the morning I?ll add the I ( biggrin)

Thanks for the constructive feedback

It rolls much better with the second I

reply by jim vecchio on 13-Nov-2023

I wish my writing would roll better!

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

Lol which spouse? A spouse could be the husband or wife! I enjoyed the use of so many rhyming words with mouse throughout this short poem. A little bit of alliteration too with sneaky, scaring and spouse. Good luck.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023

Thanks for reviewing!

I?m incline to think that the wife is scared rather than her husband

And even if he was scared he would put up a brave front. ( biggrin)